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Hola necesito presentar en la escuela una presentacion de mis datos para la clase de ingles, pero soy nivel iniciante y no se como extructurarlo y si las palabras estan bien, a continuacion les dejo lo que eh echo:

****A little information about me:

Hi, Guys n Girls, Well, My names Fulanito Detal, I was bor on January 7, Im 18 years old. My phone numbers 5544332211, I live at 123, Av. Calle street, Im from Municipio. Im doing my high school studies in the Bachillerato Colage. I job as an autoo mechanic helper. My favorite past times play guitar. I like to music, video-gamesn surfinig the Internet. My favorite bands dragonforce. My favorit food are pizzan Maxi tortas. My English teachers grate **este es para hacer el ambiente menos tenso ** My parents are Fulanito Detal, Hes 99 years old, Hes from La plata originally,n Fulanita Detal Shes 99 years old, My Brothers, He`s 15 years old.

The end, thank you very much for your attention*****

Espero me puedan decir en que estoy mal y que le puedo poner para hacerlo ver mas cool

Thank you

Note for beginning Spanish students: Fulano (Fulanito, Fulanita, etc.) is the name given to imaginary or unknown persons. Rather like saying John and Jane Doe in English. - 0074b507, Nov 9, 2011

¡Bienvenido al foro! Welcome to the forum. - 0074b507, Nov 9, 2011

Qué bien nombre ;) Fulanito Detal ... De tal - Goldie_Miel, Nov 9, 2011

Answer 1

Hi guys and girls. Well, my name is Fulanito Detal. I was born on January 7. I'm 18 years old. My phone numbers is 554433221. I live at 123, Av. Calle street. I'm from Municipio. I'm doing my high school studies in the Bachillerato College. I work as an auto mechanic assistant. My favorite past time is playing guitar. I like music, video-games, and surfing the Internet. My favorite band is Dragonforce. My favorite foods are pizza and maxi tortas. My English teacher is great. My father's name is Fulanito Detal. He is 99 years old. He is originally from La plata. My mother's name is Fulanita Detal. She is 99 years old. My brother is 15 years old.

Preste más attención a sus comas, puntos, y capitalización.

Ok thank you, is a bit difficult for me because I am a rookie but I hope to improve - axgts, Nov 9, 2011

Answer 2

A little information about me:

Hello boys and girls! Well, my name is Fulanito Detal. I was born on the 7th of January and I’m 18 years old. My phone number is 5544332211. I live in 123 Calle Street. I’m from Municipio and I’m doing my highschool studies in the Bachillerato College. I work as a car mechanic assistant. My favourite past time is playing the guitar, and I also like music, video-games and surfing the Internet. My favorite band is dragon force. My favorite foods are pizza and Maxi cakes. My English teacher is great! My father’s name is Fulanito Detal who is 99 years old and originally from La plata. My mother’s name is Fulanita Detal who is 99 years old. My brother is 15 years old.

The end, thank you very much for your attention.

Dragon Force should probably be capitalized. 99 yr. old parents have a 15 year old son. Way to go Mom and Dad! - 0074b507, Nov 9, 2011

thank you very much for your help :D - axgts, Nov 9, 2011

hahaha sorry for 99 yr... The data are false - axgts, Nov 9, 2011

axgts, this is the British way to write it. Note the differences. - Beatrice-Codder, Nov 9, 2011

high school* (2 words); assistant car mechanic*; Hope these help. - Goldie_Miel, Nov 9, 2011