Could you proofread my English mistakes

Question

Please, could you proofread my English mistakes?

After the Rosita presentation everybody, the graduates showed them to the ceremony. The ceremony also had different steps: First, the Dean of the faculty, appointed to Rosita to be the first student of her promotion to give her her degree, meanwhile her proud parents applauded; next, everybody went to reception that was to a wine of honor gave to brand new professionals. Once finished doing that, Rosita and her family could take some pictures as a memory of her happy day. At last, Rosita, could see herself the result of her effort.

Thanks

Answer 1

That was a good attempt. I have made a few alterations, I hope I haven't changed the meaning too much.

After Rosita made her presentation to everybody, the graduates showed them to the ceremony. The ceremony had different stages: First, the Dean of the faculty, appointed Rosita to be the first student of her group to receive her degree, meanwhile her proud parents applauded; next, everybody went to a reception where there was a toast in honor of the brand new professionals. Once that had finished, Rosita and her family could take some pictures as a memory of her happy day. At last, Rosita could see the result of her efforts.

thanks Marycc. - maylegoas, Nov 9, 2011

Answer 2

I feel as if you are a Spanish speaker and used an online translation tool to translate your text from Spanish into English. Thus, I have tried to capture what you may have meant.

After Rosita’s presentation to everybody, the graduates guided them to the ceremony. The ceremony also had different proceedings: first, the Dean of the faculty appointed Rosita to be the first student of her promotion to be given her degree, during which her parents applauded proudly; second, everybody went to a reception to toast in honor of the new professionals. When finished, Rosita and her family could take some pictures as a memory of her happy day. At last, Rosita could see the result of her efforts.

Yes adelino9 I am a Spanish speaker and I help me with online translation tool, but only words. Thanks for teach me - maylegoas, Nov 9, 2011

Answer 3

Your English is pretty good. I will try to edit it as best I can, and I hope I have not changed the meaning.

It will help if you post the original text.

After Rosita had made her presentation to everyone, the graduates were shown to the ceremony. There are different stages to the ceremony: First, the Dean of the faculty appointed Rosita to be the first student of her class to be given her degree, while her proud parents applauded. Next, everybody went to a reception where a toast of honor was given to the brand new professionals. Once that was done, Rosita and her family could take some pictures as a memory of her happy day. At last Rosita could see the result of her effort.

Thanks mathslover - maylegoas, Nov 9, 2011