Please, could you proofread my English mistakes? 4

Question

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Being Rosita the first student of her promotion, she was required for the main companies, and she began to set goals in order to the best worker of the Company, . Rosita was called for a transnational Company and she began to fulfill their goals already mapped out which were the following: First of all, socialize with co-workers exchanging emails and phone numbers; next, look for a co-worker that has similar goals of improving in their job performance. After that, make a note of people's birth dates in order to wish them best wishes on their birthday; as soon as possible, take pictures for posting on face book. Finally, promote a sense of cooperation between co-workers. I want say to you that with these goals Rosita was the best worker and she gradually was promoted, now she is the manager of this Company.

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Answer 1

How about this: Because Rosita was the first student to be promoted, many big companies were interested in recruiting her. She set goals for herself in order to be their best worker. An international company hired her and and she began to fulfill the goals it mapped out for her: First; socializing with co-workers,exchanging emails and phone numbers; Second; looking for co-workers who have similar goals of improving in their job performances; Third; making a note of co-workers' birth dates in order to send them best wishes on their birthdays; Fourth; as soon as possible, taking pictures to post on Facebook and finally; promoting a sense of cooperation between co-workers. With these goals Rosita became the company's best worker, eventually becoming the manager of the company.

Excellent! - Jeremias, Nov 4, 2011

thanks boca22 - maylegoas, Nov 6, 2011

Answer 2

In my opinion, if you substitute "employee" for "worker" it would sound a little more professional. Nice job of re-arranging grammar Boca!

Answer 3

good luck!