Poem Proofwrite
I wrote a poem (doesn't rhyme 
) I was wondering which translation to use.
If I were to pause, while I’m speaking a different language Would “um” translate? Is it universal? If I were to think, pensar, in the middle of a sentence Would “um” translate? Is it universal? If I were to obvlido what I was saying while trying decir Would “um” translate? Is it universal? Si yo fue to not even se the next thing to say, Would “um” translate? Is it universal?
Si tuviera que hacer una pausa, mientras estoy hablando un idioma diferente ¿"Um" se traduciría? ¿Es universal? Si yo fuera a pensar, a think, en medio de una frase ¿"Um" se traduciría? ¿Es universal? Si tuviera que forget lo que decía mientras trataba de to speak ¿"Um" se traduciría? ¿Es universal? Si yo fue incluso no se la próxima cosa que decir, ¿"Um" se traduciría? ¿Es universal?
Si tuviera que hacer una pausa, mientras estoy hablando en otro idioma Sería "um" traducir? Es universal? Si tuviera que pensar, Pensar, en el medio de una frase Sería "um" traducir? Es universal? Si tuviera que obvlido lo que estaba diciendo al intentar Hablar Sería "um" traducir? Es universal? Si yo ni siquiera FUE a sí mismo la siguiente cosa que decir, Sería "um" traducir? Es universal?
I know that sometims, meanings are lost in translation, and I really don't want that to happen.
Help me out?
2 Answers
Ellipses: Your poem sounds good in English! However, there are a couple of things that I would change in the Spanish version. One main thing I noticed is that you used the wrong word for the verb "to forget." It should be "olvidar," for example, "I forget" would be "Yo olvido" or "Olvido."
If I were to pause, while I’m speaking a different language Would “um” translate? Is it universal? If I were to think, pensar, in the middle of a sentence Would “um” translate? Is it universal? If I were to obvlido what I was saying while trying decir Would “um” translate? Is it universal? Si yo fue (fui, not fue) to not even se the next thing to say, Would “um” translate? Is it universal?
Si tuviera que hacer una pausa, mientras estoy hablando un idioma diferente ¿"Um" se traduciría? ¿Es universal? Si yo fuera (fui, not fuera) a pensar, a think, en medio de una frase ¿"Um" se traduciría? ¿Es universal? Si tuviera que forget lo que decía mientras trataba de to speak ¿"Um" se traduciría? ¿Es universal? Si yo fue (fui, not fue) incluso no se la próxima cosa que decir, ¿"Um" se traduciría? ¿Es universal?
Si tuviera que hacer una pausa, mientras estoy hablando en otro idioma Sería "um" traducir? Es universal? Si tuviera que pensar, Pensar, en el medio de una frase Sería "um" traducir? Es universal? Si tuviera que obvlido lo que estaba diciendo al intentar Hablar Sería "um" traducir? Es universal? Si yo ni siquiera FUE a sí mismo la siguiente cosa que decir, (I would say "Si yo fui no saber las palabras para decir," "If I were to not know the words to say") Sería "um" traducir? Es universal?
I like the first version that you wrote more than the second. Hope that helps. (:
¡Hola!, Ellipsis ... :
If I were to reformat your poem, would you want it to look like this? :
If I were to pause, while I’m speaking a different language Would “um” translate?
Is it universal?
If I were to think, pensar, in the middle of a sentence Would “um” translate?
Is it universal?
If I were to obvlido what I was saying while trying decir Would “um” translate?
Is it universal?
Si yo fue to not even se the next thing to say, Would “um” translate?
Is it universal?
For Ellipsis or anyone else writimg poetry, here is how to make a line end where you want it to end. Where you want a line to end, just press the "spacebar" twice and then press "enter". You must leave two spaces at the end of a line in order for the lines to show separately. I hope this is helpful to poets and others who want line formatting. Ellipsps if this is not what you wante in terms of formatting, I apologize for this little lesson.
I hope someone else will critique your composition and grammar for you. I'm not strong in those regards.
Muchos saludos/Best regards,
Moe
