Could you help me proofread my English mistake in this paragraph?
Is a good advantage to study a foreign language. Actually, in our country the student requires to know two language to graduate, and I think that this government rule is an advantage to the student, rather there is much advantages and all of these I can points out three main advantage to me: First, The student that know two language can study in other countries, and if it possible he can fallow his Master's degree or other studies. Second, In our country the bilingual professional is good evaluated to a good gob. And third, People that knowing other languages have the advantage to enjoy better their travels because they can communicate better with other people and it is possible that they can do new friends. In brief, knowing two or more language have advantages.
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¡Hola!, Maylegoas:
Here are my suggestions for you to consider.
Is a good advantage to study a foreign language. Actually, in our country
There is a strong advantage to the study of foreign languages. In our country today
the student requires to know two language to graduate, and I think that this
a student is required to know two languages in order to graduate. I think that this
government rule is an advantage to the student, rather there is much
government rule is very beneficial to students in many ways.
advantages and all of these I can points out three main advantage to me:
Let me point out three principal ways that knowing two languages benefits students.
First, The student that know two language can study in other countries,
First, a student who knows two languages is able to study in another country.
and if it possible he can fallow his Master's degree or other studies.
This would enable pursuit of, say, a masters degree or other studies abroad.
Second, In our country the bilingual professional is good evaluated to a good gob. Second, here at home, a bilingual professional is valued more in the workplace and will get a better job because of it.
And third, People that knowing other languages have the advantage to enjoy better their travels because they can communicate better with other people and it is possible that they can do new friends.
Third, people who can speak and understand another language will better enjoy any travels because they will be able to communicate with people in other countries and make new friends in the host country.
In brief, knowing two or more language have advantages.
In brief, skill and knowledge with two or more languages has many important advantages.
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Maylegoas, five days ago I posted a news report about a recent Canadian study that suggested that being bilingual may help people to avoid alzheimers disease in later life. I do not suggest you will want to change what you have written but you might want to read the news report just for you own information. I think you are a student of English and I do not know how strong your English is. But, if you are able to read and understand the news report, I think you will enjoy it. Here is a link to my entry ----> Bilingualism & Dementia.
Saludos/Regards,
Moe
This is how I would write it, I hope I haven't changed your meaning.
It is advantageous to study a foreign language. Actually, in our country students require two languages to graduate, I think that this government rule is an advantage to the student. There are many advantages, I will point out the three main advantages to me: first, the student who knows two languages can study in other countries, and possibly he can complete his Master's degree or other studies, second, in our country being bilingual helps to get a good job, third, people that know other languages have the advantage of enjoying their travels more because they can communicate better with other people and they can make new friends. In brief, knowing two, or more, languages has many advantages.
It is good to study a foreign language. Now in our country a student is required to know two languages in order to graduate, and I think that this requirement could be seen as an advantage. Actually, there are more advantages,out of which I can point main three: Firstly, a student that knows two languages can study abroad, and if it possible he can follow his Master's degree or other studies there. Secondly, in our country a bilingual professional is bound to get a good job. And last but not least, people that know other languages have the advantage to enjoy their travels better because they can communicate easily with other people and they can make new friends faster. In brief, knowing two or more languages has many advantages.
It is good to study a foreign language. Now in our country a student is required to know two languages in order to graduate, and I think that this requirement could be seen as an advantage. Actually, there are more advantages,out of which I can point main three: Firstly, a student that knows two languages can study abroad, and if it possible he can follow his Master's degree or other studies there. Secondly, in our country a bilingual professional is bound to get a good job. And third, people that know other languages have the advantage to enjoy their travels better because they can communicate easily with other people and they can make new friends faster. In brief, knowing two or more languages has many advantages.
