Please, could you proofread my mistakes in English!!

Question

The choice to get married is one of the most important decisions and commitment of our whole life we will ever make, as I know of this step so important in our life, is that I consider two important points that are the most important everybody must have before getting married: first, Faith and knowledge, and second, Marriage preparation.

First of all, In the Gospel say: "there are three great Christian powers for life are faith, hope and love" . The couple that getting married must take a time to intensified their love in their Faith because now the decision to marry this special person has been made. It is also a time of great hope, not in the sense of a vague hope that everything will be all right, but rather in the sense of having something that is well worth living for.

In addition, getting married is a commitment made before God, the State and in front of witnesses, so it is important, prepare us as well as possible by making marriage preparation. According to the Apostolic Exhortation on the family, Couples might be encouraged to reflect upon the actual formula of consent in the marriage ceremony. "I take you as my husband/wife, for better or for worse, for richer or for poorer, in sickness and in health, all the days of my life. Marriage is often for the better, for richer and experienced in good health. But at times it is for worse, it can lead to impoverishment and it will have to endure sickness. Those who intend to set out on this journey should have some sense that their commitment will be tested by life. (Fr. Michael Drumm)

To conclude, to getting married is necessary to prepare as well as possible should definitely be a priority inside the Faith, Hope and Love.

Thanks

I will!! It will take me a while to read through it, but I'll post my corrections as soon as possible! - SonrisaDelSol, Jul 22, 2011

thanks SonrisaDelSo - maylegoas, Jul 22, 2011

All of your comments and edits are terrific, and you put a lot into it. May is lucky to have such good input. I voted up all your answers! - Jeremias, Jul 22, 2011

Answer 1

The choice to get married is one of the most important decisions and commitments that we will ever make in our entire lives. Because this step is so important in our lives, I believe there are two important points that everybody should consider before getting married: first, faith and knowledge, and second, marriage preparation.

First of all, as the Gospel says: "the three great Christian powers for life are faith, hope and love" . The couple that is getting married must take time to intensify their love, within their faith, because now the decision to marry this special person has been made. It is also a time of great hope, not in the sense of a vague hope that everything will be all right, but rather in the sense of having something that is well worth living for. (that last sentence was very nicely constructed!)

In addition, getting married is a commitment made before God, the State and in front of witnesses, so it is important to prepare ourselves as best we can in preparing for marriage. According to the Apostolic Exhortation on the family, couples should be encouraged to reflect upon the actual formula of consent in the marriage ceremony. "I take you as my husband/wife, for better or for worse, for richer or for poorer, in sickness and in health, all the days of my life*. Marriage is often for the better, for richer, and experienced in good health. But at times it is for the worse, it can lead to impoverishment and it will have to endure sickness. Those who intend to set out on this journey should have some sense that their commitment will be tested by life." (Fr. Michael Drumm)

To conclude, to prepare as well as possible for marriage should definitely be a priority given the Christian tenets of Faith, Hope and Love.

Thanks

Mira May, espero que esto sea una ayuda para tí. Tal vez cambie demasiado. iY no te olvides, ponme al corriente con los resultados de tus examenes!

Gracias Jeremias, no sabes cuanto agradezco tu ayuda, este essay me demoró hacerlo casi todo el día, es mi project, lo corrijo y me voy corriendo, mi exámen final es el lunes, ya te voy contando como salgo. Gracias nuevamente. - maylegoas, Jul 22, 2011

Answer 2

The decision to get married, not the choice. Choice just does not read right here.

Answer 3

I took a bit of " license" with your work I hope you don't mind.

The choice to get married is one of the most important decisions and commitments That we will ever make in our whole life, That I know of . This step is so important in our life, that I consider these two points that as the most important before getting married: first, Faith, second knowledge and marriage preparation.

First of all, the Gospel says : "there are three great Christian powers for life, faith, hope and love" . The couple that is getting married must take the time to intensify their love in their Faith, because now the decision to marry this special person has been made. It is also a time of great hope, not in the sense of a vague hope that everything will be all right, but rather in the sense of having something that is well worth living for.

In addition, getting married is a commitment made before God, the State and in front of witnesses, so it is important. Prepare as well as possible by making marriage preparation. According to the Apostolic Exhortation on the family, Couples might be encouraged to reflect upon the actual formula of consent in the marriage ceremony. "I take you as my husband/wife, for better or for worse, for richer or for poorer, in sickness and in health, all the days of my life. Marriage is often for the better, for richer and experienced in good health. But at times it is for worse, it can lead to impoverishment and it will have to endure sickness. Those who intend to set out on this journey should have some sense that their commitment will be tested by life. (Fr. Michael Drumm)

To conclude, when getting married it is necessary to prepare as well as possible and should definitely be a priority as stated in the gospel, Faith, Hope and Love.

Thanks - maylegoas, Jul 22, 2011

Answer 4

PART ONE

The choice to get married is one of the most important decisions and commitment of our whole life we will ever make, as I know of this step so important in our life, is that I consider two important points that are the most important everybody must have before getting married: first, Faith and knowledge, and second, Marriage preparation.

The choice to get married is one of the most important decisions (I'd take out commitment here) that a person will ever make. Such an important commitment requires two steps to completion. First, one must have faith and knowledge. Second, the couple must prepare for their marriage.

Answer 5

If you want to say that the Gospels say something...you should reference where it is said, (and directly lift the text from an english version rather then trying to translate it)...thats just me being an anal post secondary student though..because I dont recognize that from the Gospels and would want to make sure credit is given where needed.

Answer 6

PART TWO

First of all, In the Gospel say: "there are three great Christian powers for life are faith, hope and love" . The couple that getting married must take a time to intensified their love in their Faith because now the decision to marry this special person has been made. It is also a time of great hope, not in the sense of a vague hope that everything will be all right, but rather in the sense of having something that is well worth living for.

The Gospel says, "There are three great Christian powers for life. They are faith, hope, and love." (see note below) Now that the decision to marry has been made, the couple must take time to intesify their love in their faith. The time leading up to marriage is full of hope. It is not the vague hope when one believes that everything will be alright. Rather, it is the sense of having something worth living for.

there are three great Christian powers for life are faith, hope and love"

Note: Even though this is a quote from the Bible, I edited the way it was phrased because it is not proper English.

Answer 7

In addition, getting married is a commitment made before God, the State and in front of witnesses, so it is important, prepare us as well as possible by making marriage preparation. According to the Apostolic Exhortation on the family, Couples might be encouraged to reflect upon the actual formula of consent in the marriage ceremony. "I take you as my husband/wife, for better or for worse, for richer or for poorer, in sickness and in health, all the days of my life. Marriage is often for the better, for richer and experienced in good health. But at times it is for worse, it can lead to impoverishment and it will have to endure sickness. Those who intend to set out on this journey should have some sense that their commitment will be tested by life. (Fr. Michael Drumm)

In addition, getting married is a commitment made before God, the state, and many witnesses. It is important to prepare for such a day through marriage preparation. According to the Apostolic Exhortation on the family, couples are encouraged to reflect upon the actual formula of consent in the marriage ceremony. (Note: I don't know what that means.)

What does this Fr. Michael Drumm part mean? I don't understand. Please leave a comment explaining what it is, and I will edit the rest of this paragraph.

Answer 8

To conclude, to getting married is necessary to prepare as well as possible should definitely be a priority inside the Faith, Hope and Love.

To conclude, when getting married, preparation based on the Christian values of faith, hope, and love, is necessary.

thanks Sonrisa Del Sol you are great and fast. - maylegoas, Jul 22, 2011

Answer 9

Your paragraph is great, your English too. Just a few confusions

the words in brackets are words that should be deleted ok?

The choice to get married is one of the most important decisions and commitments in our whole life that we will ever make, (as I know of) this step so important in our life, is that I consider two important points that are the most important. Everybody should consider them before getting married: first, Faith and knowledge, and second, Marriage preparation.

First of all, the Gospel says: "there are three great Christian powers in life (are): faith, hope and love" . The couple that get married must take the time to intensify their love in their Faith because now the decision to marry this special person has been made. It is also a time of great hope, not in the sense of a vague hope that everything will be all right, but rather in the sense of having something that is well worth living for.

In addition, getting married is a commitment made before God, the State and in front of witnesses, so it is important to prepare ourselves as well as possible by making marriage preparation. According to the Apostolic Exhortation on the family, Couples might be encouraged to reflect upon the actual formula of consent in the marriage ceremony. "I take you as my husband/wife, for better or for worse, for richer or for poorer, in sickness and in health, all the days of my life. Marriage is often for the better, for richer and experienced in good health. But at times it is for worse, it can lead to impoverishment and it will have to endure sickness. Those who intend to set out on this journey should have some sense that their commitment will be tested by life. (Fr. Michael Drumm)

To conclude, When getting married preparing yourself as well as possible is necessary and should be a priority inside the Faith, Hope and Love.

* the Gospels say (Gospels should be plural) - toothpastechica, Jul 22, 2011

Thanks - maylegoas, Jul 22, 2011