Please, could you proofread my mistakes?

Question

This is a paragraph when I'm using quotations as support and focus sentences.

When there is love among humans, euthanasia does not exist. Aggressive medical treatment no longer results appropriate to patient when he is in a situation that death is clearly imminent and inevitable, in his book Medical Ethics, author Kevin D. O'Rourke claimed one can in conscience "refuse forms of treatment that would only secure a precarious and burdensome prolongation of life, so long as the normal care due to the sick person in similar cases is not uninterrupted"(148). Furthermore, according to John Paul II in his Document The Gospel of Life, he said to forgo extraordinary or disproportionate means is not the equivalent of suicide or euthanasia it rather expresses of the human condition in the face of death (145). In short, what a sick person needs besides more medications, need that it is love, supernatural warmth, and ought to be surrounded by the affection of his/her family, doctors and nurses.

thanks.

Answer 1

Wow, that is quite a complicated piece of prose. My suggestions and corrections follow:

This is a paragraph in which I'm using quotations as support and focus sentences.

When there is love among humans, euthanasia does not exist. Aggressive medical treatment is not appropriate for a patient who is in a situation in which death is clearly imminent and inevitable. In his book, Medical Ethics, author Kevin D. O'Rourke claims that one can, in conscience, "refuse forms of treatment that would only secure a precarious and burdensome prolongation of life, so long as the normal care due to the sick person in similar cases is not uninterrupted" (148). Furthermore, according to John Paul II in his Document, The Gospel of Life, to forgo extraordinary or disproportionate means of treatment is not the equivalent of suicide or euthanasia; it rather expresses the human condition in the face of death (145). In short, what a sick person needs besides more medications is love and supernatural warmth. He ought to be surrounded by the affection of his/her family, doctors and nurses.

thanks.

¡No hay de que!

Thanks Jeremias, but I jave a doubt, in direct quotation the verb claim is not in past tense? - maylegoas, Jul 19, 2011

That is an interesting question. In this case, where the book by O'Rourke is more or less contemporary, one can use the present or past equally well for the verb of attribution, "to claim". - Jeremias, Jul 19, 2011

You know, I think you are technically correct in your supposition. 'In his book, Thomas Wolfe SAYS you can't go home again.' But, 'In his book, Thomas Wolfe SAID, "You can't go home again." - Jeremias, Jul 19, 2011

thanks Jeremias for teach me - maylegoas, Jul 19, 2011

one last question what does un-accept mean? I check this because I agree and grateful for your answer, but I don't know if it is correct. - maylegoas, Jul 19, 2011

Jeremias, In direct quotation also use "that"? - maylegoas, Jul 19, 2011

Answer 2

This is a paragraph when [where instead of when] I'm using quotations as support and [to] focus [the or my] sentences.

When there is love among humans, euthanasia does not exist. Aggressive medical treatment no longer results appropriate to [gives appropriate results to a] patient when he is in a situation that [where instead of that] death is clearly imminent and inevitable, [I suggest a period here and the beginning of a new sentence.] in his book [on] Medical Ethics, author Kevin D. O'Rourke claimed one can in conscience "refuse forms of treatment that would only secure a precarious and burdensome prolongation of life, so long as the normal care due to the sick person in similar cases is not uninterrupted"(148). Furthermore, according to John Paul II in his Document The Gospel of Life, he said to forgo extraordinary or disproportionate means is not the equivalent of suicide or euthanasia[John Paul II would have done well to have used a comma here. ] it rather expresses of [delete of] the human condition in the face of death (145). In short, what a sick person needs besides more medications, need that it [you can delete need that it] is love, supernatural warmth, and ought[you can delete ought] to be surrounded by the affection of his/her family, doctors and nurses.

This is brilliantly written! I would be proud to be the author

If the title of the book is "Medical Ethics" leave out "on". But, if it is a book about medical ethics without a psecific title, put the 'on' in. - katydew, Jul 19, 2011

My typing is terrible! "specific" title... sorry about that. - katydew, Jul 19, 2011

Thanks terrifurtle for to teach me - maylegoas, Jul 19, 2011

You are most welcome! - territurtle, Jul 19, 2011

Answer 3

When there is love among humans, euthanasia does not exist. Aggressive medical treatment no longer becomes appropriate in case of terminally-ill patients where death is clearly imminent and inevitable. In his book Medical Ethics, author Kevin D. O'Rourke claims that one can conscientiously "refuse forms of treatment that would only secure a precarious and burdensome prolongation of life, so long as the normal care due to the sick person in similar cases is not uninterrupted" (148). Furthermore, according to John Paul II in his Document The Gospel of Life, he says "to forgo extraordinary or disproportionate means is not the equivalent of suicide or euthanasia it rather expresses of the human condition in the face of death." (145). In short, what a terminally-ill patient needs, besides more medications, is love, supernatural warmth, to be surrounded by the affection of his/her family, doctors and nurses.

Yes, terminally-ill patient is much better than 'sick person'. - katydew, Jul 19, 2011

Answer 4

I would use, "Where there is love"... just sounds better to me in English.

Aggressive medical treatment is no longer appropriate for a patient in a situation where death is clearly imminent and inevitable. Use a period then start with In his book....

In short, what a sick person needs, besides more medication, is love, supernatural warmth, and to be surrounded by the affection of his family, doctors, and nurses.