Could you proofread my mistakes.?

Question

In this written, I'm considering a topic sentence, supporting ideas and concluding sentence

          My Pet

My dear pet was an American Rottweiler called Braulio, and it would say that he was an intelligent dog. He came home when having three months, and he was growing join to our family, for example when I gave the lunch, he came to me trying his plate in his snout and it putted close to my feet, when I did my household chores I told Braulio traime el trapo de sacudir, (I told him in Spanish because he understood English) and he run took the clean cloth and gave me, if he left his ball out of side I told him Braulio llévate tu pelota, and he immediately putting his ball in his site. Imagine that his Veterinarian Doctor told me: "Mrs. film your dog, because nobody believe how is your pet. If I would have all things that Braulio help me in the household chores, this written would be too long. In conclusion, My pet Braulio was an incredible and amazing American Rottweiler dog.

Thanks

I will :) Please give me a few minutes to read it through and I will post an answer soon. - SonrisaDelSol, Jul 11, 2011

OK thanks SonrisaDelSo, - maylegoas, Jul 11, 2011

Answer 1

Imagine that his Veterinarian Doctor told me: "Mrs. film your dog, because nobody believe how is your pet.

Again, this is a little confusing. I would say... I imagined that his veterinarian told me, "Mrs. Film, nobody can believe that your dog is your pet!

If I would have all things that Braulio help me in the household chores, this written would be too long. In conclusion, My pet Braulio was an incredible and amazing American Rottweiler dog.

If I were to list all the chores with which Braulio helped, this would be too long! In conclusion, my pet Braulio was an incredible and amazing American Rottweiler.

Bien hecho. Please feel free to PM me if you need more help or an explanation.

Great work

Thanks a lot SonrisaDelSol - maylegoas, Jul 11, 2011

My pet died one year ago - maylegoas, Jul 11, 2011

You're welcome. Oh no, I'm so sorry to hear that :( I love dogs. Braulio sounded wonderful! - SonrisaDelSol, Jul 11, 2011

Answer 2

Please remember to use periods instead of commas

My dear pet was an American Rottweiler called Braulio, and it would say that he was an intelligent dog. He came home when having three months, and he was growing join to our family,

My dear pet was an American Rottweiler called Braulio, and I would say that he was an intelligent dog. He came home when he was three months old, and he soon joined our family.

for example when I gave the lunch, he came to me trying his plate in his snout and it putted close to my feet, when I did my household chores I told Braulio traime el trapo de sacudir, (I told him in Spanish because he understood English)

For example. when I was serving lunch, he came to me holding his plate on his snout, and he put it close to my feet. When I did my household chores, I told Braulio, "Traime el trapo de sacudir." I told him in Spanish because he does not understand English.

and he run took the clean cloth and gave me, if he left his ball out of side I told him Braulio llévate tu pelota, and he immediately putting his ball in his site.

This is a little confusing, and I'm not sure what you're trying to say. I would say... **He took the clean cloth and gave it to me. He left his ball outside. I told Braulio, "Llévate tu pelota." He immediately put his ball at his side.

[Not done yet. Please wait for my next post for part 2. ]

Hola Sonrisa! :) - fjfuentesh, Jul 11, 2011

Hola! - SonrisaDelSol, Jul 11, 2011

I think I would use the word, 'nose' instead of snout since that is usually for a pig. - katydew, Jul 11, 2011

Answer 3

My dear pet was an American Rottweiler named Braulio, and I would say that he was an intelligent dog. He came home when he was three months old, and he soon joined our family. For example, when I gave him lunch, he brought me his plate on his nose and * put it* close to my feet. When I did my household chores I would tell Braulio, "traime el trapo de sacudir", (I would tell him in Spanish because he didn'tunderstand* English) and he would run and bring back the clean cloth. If he left his ball outside I would tell * him 'Braulio, llévate tu pelota', and he *would * immediately *put his ball by my side. Would you believe that his veterinarian told me, "Lady, film your dog, because nobody is going to believe what your pet does!" If I told you all the things that Braulio helped me with in household chores, it would take too long to write. In conclusion, My pet, Braulio, was an incredible and amazing American Rottweiler dog.

Because Braulio did things more than once, I would use the past form 'would' after you say 'when he'....

Answer 4

In the part about the vet you might have meant: "Just imagine, the vet told me, "Ma'ma, you should take video of your dog because no one would believe the things he does".

Many times you refer to your dog in the past tense. If he is still alive you would use the present tense.

my pet Is an American

he is an intelligent

when I give him

And so on.

Yes, It is, thanks Lleatha - maylegoas, Jul 11, 2011

Letha, my dog died and I didn't take video and no one would believe how was him - maylegoas, Jul 11, 2011

He sounds like a great dog. - Leatha, Jul 11, 2011

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