Could you proofread my mistakes is about topic sentences.

Question

Are these sentences OK.? They are Topic Sentences.

Movies require several and big locals.

spectacular films make movies a place to relax

Thanks.

Answer 1

Movies require several and big locals.

spectacular films make movies a place to relax

local en español es "place" en inglés.

Movie theatres (o cinemas) require several and large places

(no estoy seugura de que quieres decir con "several", posible que quieres decir diverso... "diverse")

Spectacular es un poco raro,

dice = entertaining (?)

esta frase es perfecto entertaining films make movies a place to relax

thanks dewclaw - maylegoas, Jul 7, 2011

Answer 2

Movies require several and big locals.

Lo que estás tratando de decir aquí no es claro.

To see a movie requires a big theater? Movies require the existence of lots of big theaters?

Spectacular films make movies a place to relax.

Esto también es un poco confuso. Tal vez simplamente quieres decir,

Seeing a movie in a theater is a great way to relax.

"Spectacular" en inglés quiere decir "increible", no refiere a un espectaculo. Puedes relajar en el cine aúnque la pelicula sea sencillo.

Espero que esto te haya ayudado.

Thanks Jeremias, lo que pasa es que tengo que escribir dos topic sentences usando como topic: " Movies" and I should give these topic sentences with controlling ideas for the same topic. - maylegoas, Jul 7, 2011

Answer 3

Que estás tratando decir cuando dices "locals?"

Not sure if I wrote that in spanish correctly or not. I'm working on it.

tratar de = try to ....tratar de decir - dewclaw, Jul 7, 2011

renowr1ter your Spanish is OK. My sentence in Spanish is Los cines requieren varios y grandes locales. - maylegoas, Jul 7, 2011