Clarification on my attempt at translation

Question

An Email from my fiancée contains one part that I can't quite get the right translation of.

" La risa que sopla al atardecer. Que a los otros un poco de frío viene traer ".

My translation is " Golden moments as the summer sun. The breeze blowing in the evening to each other it brings a little cold ".

It just doesn't sound right to me, I've been moving it around for nearly an hour now.

Happy days, John in Oz

Answer 1

Mi intento:

The laughter that blows at sunset, that comes to bring to others a bit of cold.

The laughter that blows at sunset, that to others a bit of cold brings. :) - chileno, Jul 1, 2011

Answer 2

Honestly, I think the first word should be la brisa which means breeze, unless it is extremely poetic and is saying laughter brings a cold chill.

"The breeze that blows at sunset. That brings a chill to others."

We all could probably use a bit more context to have better translations, but that's my attempt.

I agree that brisa will make more sense than risa. This is the first time I've heard of laughter blowing, although one can argue that it could be a metaphor.:) - Deanski, Jul 1, 2011

Sure, almost nothing is wrong in poetry, but I don't see that metaphor here :) - shakedowndave, Jul 1, 2011

Answer 3

The laugh it blows at the sundown ,which brings a little chill to others.