Is this letter as eloquent as I think it is?
I would like a native to tell me if this would be considered eloquent Spanish.
He pasado tres días extraños: el mar, la playa, los caminos me fueron trayendo recuerdos de otros tiempos. No sólo imágenes: también voces, gritos y largos silencios de otros días. Es curioso, pero vivir consiste en construir futuros recuerdos; ahora mismo, aquí frente al mar, sé que estoy preparando recuerdos minuciosos, que alguna vez me traerán la melancolía y la desesperanza.
El mar está ahí, permanente y rabioso. Mi llanto de entonces, inútil; también inútiles mis esperas en la playa solitaria, mirando tenazmente al mar. ¿Has adivinado y pintado este recuerdo mío o has pintado el recuerdo de muchos seres como vos y yo?
Pero ahora tu figura se interpone: estás entre el mar y yo. Mis ojos encuentran tus ojos. Estás quieto y un poco desconsolado, me miras como pidiendo ayuda.
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I have spent three weird days: the sea, the beach, the roads were bringing me memories from other times. Not inly images: voices too, screams and long silences/pauses from other days. It is curious, but living consists of building future memories; right now, here in front of the ocean/sea, I know I am preparing minute/detailed memories, that sometime will bring me melancholy and hopelessness.
The ocean/sea is there, permanent and furious. My crying from then, useless; also useless my waiting (periods) en the solitary beach, looking tenaciously/stubbornly the sea/ocean. Have you guessed and painted this memory of mine or have you painted the memory of many beings like you and I?
But now your figure/silhouette interposes: you are between the ocean and I. My eyes find your eyes. You are still and a bit inconsolable, you look at me as if asking for help.
Eloquent?
I don't know, you tell me. 
Someone should take a shot at translating it just as eloquently in English. Who's up for it? Then we'll look up the version of the book published in English and see how close we get!
Or am I getting too over excited about it? haha
Araña, I hope you don't mind if I use the 'mirás' example both to be helpful to you, and to revive a very good thread made by our Argentinian friend, Benz.
Is there a word missing after 'también inutiles mis' ?
Sorry Araña, I'm not native either. Did you write it? What comes next?
Pero ahora tu figura se interpone: estás entre el mar y yo. Mis ojos encuentran tus ojos. Estás quieto y un poco desconsolado, me mirás como pidiendo ayuda.
"... entre mí y el mar."
To avoid redundancy, I would say "Los ojos mios encuentran los tuyos."
"Estás quieta y un poco desconsolada, me miras como si pidieras ayuda,"
The question is "Is this letter considered eloquent?" The answer is no because writing in Spanish is very flowery whereas writing in English is very concise. That is why it is difficult to translate, say a paragraph in a book, from Spanish to English. This is the norm when you read letters, books, etc. in Spanish.
