Check my essay for accuary please?
I'm in spanish 2. My teacher said to use normal tense because we aren't talking about the past. This essay is for a trip that we are to plan
Voy a ir a España. Este país es muy popular. Voy a viajar en un avión. Yo nunca viajé en un avión. Quiero ver el Mediterranean Sea. Yo quiero practicar hablar español. Quiero ir a un café. El arte es muy bonito. Tienen buena comida en España. Voy a ir en julio. Tengo vacaciones de verano. El tiempo es bueno. Voy a salgo el cinco de julio. Yo empaco los pantalones y camisetas. Yo empaco mi teléfono. No me gusta nada nadar. Yo no empaco nadar ropas. voy a ir a un restaurante. voy a ir de compras. Voy a ir en un viaje. voy a caminar la playa y montar mi bicicleta. la moneda es el euro. vamos a pagar aproximadamente un mil cincuenta y nueve dólares por billetes de avión.
3 Answers
Este país es muy popular --> Es un país popular.
Spanish speakers have a name for the Mediterranean-- it's called el Mediterráneo
"Yo quiero practicar hablar español"--> Quiero practicar español. ("Yo" is not needed here-since "quiero" is only used with "yo", you can just say "quiero" and the "yo" is implied. The way you have it here, you are emphasizing that you are talking about yourself..... "Hablar" is okay here, but it is not necessary.)
"Tienen buena comida en España." --> change "tienen" to "hay"
Voy a salir, not voy a salgo.
Grammatically, this is very good, but otherwise, not so much. I don't mean that in a mean way, but do you speak/write like that in English with 5-word sentences. You could make this essay a little more exciting by combining your sentences, varying your verbs, etc.
This is what you have: I am going to go to Spain. It is a popular country. I am going to travel in a plane. I have never flown in a plane. I want to see the Mediterranean Sea. I want to practice speaking Spanish. I want to go to a café. The art is very pretty. They have good food in Spain. I am going in July.....
You can do better than that. I know you can.
How about saying things like: I am going to go to Spain, which is a very popular country. I will have to go in July because that's when I have vacations. When I go, I am going to fly in a plane because I've never flown in a plane before. After I arrive, I will visit the Mediterranean Sea, various cafés and admire the beautiful art.
Take a look at these verbs and phrases and try to incorporate them into your essay: cual es, volar, comida rica, heremosa, obra, tengo que _____, cuando, porque, deseo, me encanta, traer.....
Use it if you want, don't use it if you don't want- it's your choice, but I think you have the potential to do great in Spanish- you just need to put a little effort into it. And don't use the things you don't understand--- teachers hate that and that makes them wonder if you cheated. If you decide to change your essay, repost it and I'll take another look.
I would change 'Yo nunca viajé en un avión' to
'nunca he viajado por avión' 
Before I make some suggestions, I need to know what level of Spanish you are taking because my suggestions will be based on that--- ex: do you only know present, preterite and imperfect tenses?
