Se puede ver claramente..

Question

I was hoping someone who had a second could proofread this for me. Thanks for your time!

Se puede ver claramente que el protagonista en este cuento busca de una perspectiva nueva de la que ver el mundo. Las descripciones que el autor usa para comparar los ojos de los peces con los de los axolotl le dan al lector un ejemplo perfecto de esto. Dice: “Diversos peces me mostraban la simple estupidez de sus hermosos ojos semejantes a los nuestros. Los ojos de los axolotl me decían de la presencia de una vida diferente, de otra manera de mirar.” Más tarde en el cuento se encuentra la oración: “Los rasgos antropomórficos de un mono revelan, al revés de lo que cree la mayoría, la distancia que va de ellos a nosotros”, la cual apoya fuertemente la metamorfosis del pensamiento que sucede dentro del personaje principal.

You are doing a great job! - 00a4c226, May 2, 2011

gracias - pescador1, May 2, 2011

Answer 1

Just looking at the first line what is it you want to say with 'busca de'? If it is 'looking for' then 'busca' by itself says that. If you want to say 'looking from' then I think perhaps 'ver' would be the verb for 'looking' - but it'd be good to wait for a native to weigh in

Also I was wondering about 'decían' just to confirm that you did you want to say 'were telling' rather than 'told'. Perhaps adding the English version would be useful

I have no English version. That is a sample of text from the story. - pescador1, May 2, 2011

yeah, that de is something i meant to edit. Thanks. - pescador1, May 2, 2011

ok so you wrote this story? can you also write what you wanted to say in English just to help us see if you're saying what you wanted to if that makes sense ;) - Kiwi-Girl, May 2, 2011