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i really need to know if my homerwork is correct or not please can someone correct if I made a mistakes maybe with the grammar

Today,We are going to talk to you about KITESURFING. we will tell you about the equipments , rules and everything that you need to know for practicing this extreme sport. Think about it for a moment. Kiteboarding “Kite” and ”Boarding”The first part is “Kite” and the second part is “Boarding”The place to begin is to learn and then Master your “Kite Skills” pAmela can you tell me what kitesurfing is? Kitesurfing or Kiteboarding is a surface water sport that uses the wind to pull a rider through the water on a small surfboard or a kiteboard (similar to a wakeboard. It’s important that people really know everything about the topic if they want to practice KITESURFING, Because this sport is so dangerous ,It must to be practiced carefully.Furthermore, to learn kitesurfing is to talk to a professional instructor and get some lessons. However, you can also study on your own and start out days with a soft breeze.It ‘s important that you follow this step first. For instance, an eighteen year old lady who did this activity got injured.Because she didn’t know all the rules at all for doing this she broke her arms,therefore,she is unable to practice any xtrme sport anymore.her doctor told her if she practiced one more time this sport she could die since Not using any equipment ,she suffered the consequences.If she had taken the required lessons,she wouln’t have gotten injured. Next, we’ll tell you about the Equipments: that you wear special equipments is necessary. Rarely do we wear this kind of clothes but in this case you have to use special clothes. Kite Pants 'Boardies or trousers worn over your wetsuit. Despite the fact that they're most likely not gonna save your life they're the one thing that will mark you as a kitesurfer rather then a windsurfer along the beach. When using a seat harness they'll protect your wetsuit from wear and tear. Furthermore they look cool! ! ! Kite surfing can be an expensive affair, in case you are looking for the extremities in this sport. Nevertheless, as far as a beginner is concerned, it is fairly cheap There are 5 main components in a kitesurfing system:

1. The kite (includes the kite's bridle).
2. The lines.
3. The kite control device (including safety release system).
4. The board (including fins, foot straps or binding and leash). And the kitesurfer (including harness, life jacket NECESSARY CONDITIONS: In no way is It possible practicing this sport in unauthorized beaches. Because If people do that, they have to pay fines. To conclude , let me tell you a little more about kitesurfing Never had I heard about this sport before but since we were asked to work on a project about an unusual sport ,my friend and I know what kitesurfing is about While searching on the internet.I found that there a lot of championships like: ? The European championship ? Australia ? Canada ? France ? Germany ? Usa and many more Why we chose this sport is because we tought few of you knew about it, and I think we were right and it its very interesting. Before I finish let give you my opinion Personally speaking I don’t like practicing dangerous sports neither does my partner. This kind of sport sounds awesome However the number of deaths are increasing lately. The fact that I see blood is awefull. I can’t stand seeing blood. Finally we have Fernando paraud she told us a bit about her experiences: He said that he broke his hand in two places in 1ft of water whilst trying a Slim Chance He said that he loved kitesurfing because the individuality and freedom of the sport. There wasn’t team, no tactics, just him, the wind and the water and whatever tune was stuck in his head. Then we have Simon, he is from Australia he said he wanted to master all of the handle pass tricks and bust out some Mega Loops and wanted to have fun on the water and meet as many people as he could.. said that When we kiteboarded on the water, we initially were spending 50% of the time riding with either foot forward. Yup... It was awkward in the beginning, and even more reason to practice the other stance before stepping into kiteboarding. Whether you will like it is depend on you.

Pleaser remember that correct spelling and capitalization are mandatory on this site, welcome to the forum:) - 00494d19, Mar 23, 2011

Answer 1

Dear Katita,

Here are some suggestions:

We are going to talk to you about

This is not incorrect, but to my taste the sentence would be a little more fluent if you would say "to talk about" or "to tell you about"

The place to begin is to learn

How about "You start out by learning" or "First, you have to learn"

It must to be practiced carefully

This is not correct, this should read: "It must be practised carefully"

and start out days with a soft breeze

and start out on days with a soft breeze

an eighteen year old lady

This is not incorrect, but "lady" isn't often used for an 18-year-old unless, for instance, she was blocking someone's way . Then a person would say "Hey lady, you are in my way". Normally, the word suggests that the person is a more mature woman, for instance a person in their thirties, fourties, and so on. I would use "an 18-year-old girl"

she is unable to practice any xtrme sport anymore

I would suggest: She isn't able to practice any extreme sport anymore

if she practiced one more time this sport

This is not correct. It should be: "If she practised this sport one more time".

that you wear special equipments is necessary

I can't explain why, but I believe "equipment" is better, the word isn't used in plural

not gonna save your life

This is not correct English. It should be "not going to save"

rather then

rather than

In no way is It possible practicing this sport in unauthorised beaches

to practice.. on unauthorized

because we tought few of you knew about it

thought... would know

and it its very interesting

it is

Before I finish let give you

let me give you or I would like to give you

I see blood is awefull

awful

Finally we have Fernando paraud she told us a bit about her experiences: He said that he broke his hand in two places in 1ft of water whilst trying a Slim Chance He said that he loved kitesurfing because the individuality and freedom of the sport.

The use of "he" and "she" is not consequent. If Fernando is a male (which I think he is..." there shouldn't be "she" or "her" in this paragraph

There wasn’t team

a team

Finally, you should have another look at your capitalisation and punctualisation, because it isn't always correct and it's inconsequent.

Hope this helps

Saludos, Chica

wow, very generous chica, gracias - 00494d19, Mar 23, 2011

Thank you so much - katita1992, Mar 23, 2011

Welcome :) - chicasabrosa, Mar 24, 2011

Answer 2

Hi Katita

It must to be practiced carefully

It must be practiced carefully

This has been mentioned above by Chichasabrosa but it is worth noting that ..

ALL modals in English are always followed by a "base" verb - that means like the infinitive but without the "to" - there are no exceptions to this rule (unlike some other aspects of English grammar)

Answer 3

Today,We are going to talk to you about KITESURFING. we will tell you about the equipments , rules and everything that you need to know for practicing this extreme sport. Think about it for a moment. Kiteboarding “Kite” and ”Boarding”The first part is “Kite” and the second part is “Boarding”The place to begin is to learn and then Master your “Kite Skills” Pamela can you tell me what kitesurfing is? Kitesurfing or Kiteboarding is a surface water sport that uses the wind to pull a rider through the water on a small surfboard or a kiteboard (similar to a wakeboard. It’s important that people really know everything about the topic if they want to practice KITESURFING, Because this sport is so dangerous ,It must to be practiced carefully.Furthermore, to learn kitesurfing is to talk to a professional instructor and get some lessons. However, you can also study on your own and start out days with a soft breeze.It ‘s important that you follow this step first. For instance, an eighteen year old lady who did this activity got injured.Because she didn't know all the rules at all for doing this she broke her arms,therefore,she is unable to practice any extreme sport anymore.her doctor told her if she practiced one more time this sport she could die since Not using any equipment ,she suffered the consequences.If she had taken the required lessons,she wouldn't have gotten injured. Next, we’ll tell you about the Equipments: that you wear special equipments is necessary. Rarely do we wear this kind of clothes but in this case you have to use special clothes. Kite Pants 'Boardies or trousers worn over your wetsuit. Despite the fact that they're most likely not gonna save your life they're the one thing that will mark you as a kitesurfer rather then a windsurfer along the beach. When using a seat harness they'll protect your wetsuit from wear and tear. Furthermore they look cool! ! ! Kite surfing can be an expensive affair, in case you are looking for the extremities in this sport. Nevertheless, as far as a beginner is concerned, it is fairly cheap There are 5 main components in a kitesurfing system:

1. The kite (includes the kite's bridle).
2. The lines.
3. The kite control device (including safety release system).
4. The board (including fins, foot straps or binding and leash). And the kitesurfer (including harness, life jacket NECESSARY CONDITIONS: In no way is It possible practicing this sport in unauthorized beaches. Because If people do that, they have to pay fines. To conclude , let me tell you a little more about kitesurfing Never had I heard about this sport before but since we were asked to work on a project about an unusual sport ,my friend and I know what kitesurfing is about While searching on the internet.I found that there a lot of championships like: ? The European championship ? Australia ? Canada ? France ? Germany ? Usa and many more Why we chose this sport is because we thought few of you knew about it, and I think we were right and it its very interesting. Before I finish let give you my opinion Personally speaking I don’t like practicing dangerous sports neither does my partner. This kind of sport sounds awesome However the number of deaths are increasing lately. The fact that I see blood is awful. I can’t stand seeing blood. Finally we have Fernando paraud she told us a bit about her experiences: He said that he broke his hand in two places in 1ft of water whilst trying a Slim Chance He said that he loved kitesurfing because the individuality and freedom of the sport. There wasn't team, no tactics, just him, the wind and the water and whatever tune was stuck in his head. Then we have Simon, he is from Australia he said he wanted to master all of the handle pass tricks and bust out some Mega Loops and wanted to have fun on the water and meet as many people as he could.. said that When we kiteboarded on the water, we initially were spending 50% of the time riding with either foot forward. Yup... It was awkward in the beginning, and even more reason to practice the other stance before stepping into kiteboarding. Whether you will like it is depend on you.

I have just corrected some spelling mistakes, wait for a native to read through this, ¿Nos puedes decir de qué país eres? por qué no participas en nuestros chats en voz? - 00494d19, Mar 23, 2011

I am from PERU ;) but thank you anyway ......: me gustaria participar en los chat de voz pero nose como?¿?¡ hago para eso es que recien soy nueva en esto te agradeceria mucho si me ayudaras gracias :) - katita1992, Mar 23, 2011

"the equipment" (not a countable noun) - pesta, Mar 23, 2011

Answer 4

Katita, mira tu mensaje privado.

Answer 5

tHank you so much

Answer 6

Katita, are you looking for a proofreading in English?