Translation of a medical phrase

Question

Hello all,

I'm working on translating a document from English to Spanish. It is a flyer for new patients called "How to prepare for your surgery" (I also posted another question on SpanishDict here about another phrase from the same flyer). The phrase that I am uncertain of in this case is:

"If you would like to contact Swedish in advance to register and schedule your pre-admission appointment, please call the phone number below."

My translation is:

"Si le gustaría comunicarse con Swedish por adelantado para registrarlo y programar su cita preadmisión, por favor llame el numero de teléfono que figura abajo"

Could someone let me know if this is an accurate and correct translation? If there is a better way to express this, I would be very grateful to learn what it is!

Gracias por adelantado.

Answer 1

Assuming that "Swedish" is the name of a company or health-care facility, I would say:

Si desea comunicarse con Swedish para registrarse con antelación y para programar su cita de pre-ingreso, favor de marcar al número telefónico abajo.

There may be better ideas for translating "pre-admission appointment." Maybe something along the lines of "cita preparativa para ingreso" would work, but I think that may be more formal than the source text.

I took the liberty of moving the "in advance" to a more logical place in the sentence, since the English sentence is not-so-logically worded, i.e., contact Swedish in advance of what?

This is just a first shot at it, and I am sure that native speakers from different countries could give it various flavors.

Maybe I wasn't totally clear on the context in terms of "in advance". Before this sentence, it says to wait for Swedish to call you to make an appoint, but if you want to you can call Swedish "in advance" of their call to make an appointment. - hiladora, Mar 18, 2011

On "preadmssion": I choose "cita preadmisión", because in other Spanish language materials released by the hospital this is the phrase they use. It is located in the US, if that is of any help. - hiladora, Mar 18, 2011

Oh, and also: do you find my translation more or less correct? Or is the sentence that I presented way off? - hiladora, Mar 18, 2011

Answer 2

It sounds great. You could say 'por abajo' instead of 'que figura abajo'. Yours is the most professional choice, but the more common choice is por abajo. Simply a matter of personal choice though

Ah ok, thanks for the input. - hiladora, Mar 18, 2011