Un poema...
Hola..
I had to write a poem for a class. I know this is typically not for homework help, but I was wondering if anyone could point out any places that I really need to change it. It's not very long and it's modeled after a certain style- so if it seems a bit sad.. thats why.. 
A pensar en todos los lugares en que he vivido, recuerdo que me sentía atrapada. La casa se parecía como una Cárcel y mis padres como los Guardias. Quería mudarme; Ser adulta.
Ahora sólo me siento la nostalgia. Ir a la casa. Quedarme en la casa. Con mis padres, mis hermanos, el amor de la familia que la Libertad no puede reemplazar. Son estas Libertades que ahora me atrapan.
¡¡¡¡gracias!!!!
2 Answers
By the way, there are "categories" for posts. There is one called "Proof Reading." That is the best place to post something you have written to ask others to proof it or comment on it. You might even want to repost your poem over there instead of here in the Vocabulary and Grammar section.
That is a great poem. My spanish isn't good enough to critique it, but it's good enough to enjoy it. I once had to write a poem in spanish following a certain style and I really enjoyed the challenge. Good job, and thanks for posting it!
