Please correct my servicio de citas

Question

Hi there, I'm currently taking Spanish 3 and I have a project that the teacher wants us to write a profile for servicio de citas.

I haven't meet few of the requirements for this project, which are the usage of por/para, mandatos nosotros, and pronombres personales. I don't really know where or how I should add them. Also, my writing is very redundant; I have to repeat the same start for some sentences. I want to fix it but I don't really know how to. Please proofread it. Thank you!!!

Here's the English version of it (redundant too):

Hi, what´s up. My name is (name). I´m 25 years old. I have black hair and brown eyes. I´m a nurse. I´m understanding, considerate and sincere. My hobbies are to play badminton, play video games and draw. I´m looking for guy who is kind, understanding and considerate. I´m looking for a guy who is taller than me. I´m looking for a guy who has a stable job. I´m looking for a guy who will support me. It will surprise you that I want to go to England. It will surprise you that I like sweets very much. Bye! I wish I can hear from you!

And here's the Spanish portion:

Hola. ¿Qué pasa? Me llamo (nombre). Tengo veinte y cinco años. Tengo pelo negro y ojos marrones. Soy una enfermera. Soy compresiva, considerada y sincera. Mis pasatiempos y gustos son jugar el bádminton, jugar los videojuegos y dibujar. Busco chico que sea amable, comprensivo y considerado. Busco chico que es más alta que me. Busco chico que tenga ocupación estable. Busco chico que me apoye. Les sorprenderá que yo quiera visitar Inglaterra. Les sorprenderá que me gusten los dulces mucho. ¡Adiós y ojalá escuchar de tu!

Answer 1

Busco chico que es más alta que me

más alto que yo [soy]. Alto because it describes him; not you.

I'm not sure that your sentences using It will surprise you that....take the subjunctive. They sound like they are informing us of the subordinate clause.

If you said I am surprised that... then you are expressing your emotional reaction to the subordinate clause. (or you could still be declaring something), It depends on whether we know about the subordinate clause already. [in this case, we do not]

I'd let a native chime in on that, however.

...ojalá oír de ti?

Soy enfermera (I don't think the indefinite article, una, is used with professions.

Busco chico que es más alta que me

Why did you use the indicative mood for Ser when in all your other sentences you used the subjunctive mood?

for the surprising part, I meant like: It will surprise you that... And my teacher wants us to start with Les sorprendera que... Do I use it correctly

Yes and no. The It will surprise you that part looks ok, but your les is 3rd person you or ustedes. Oops. Forget that. It depends on where your Spanish is being spoken. I was going to say that you use tú (ti) at the end so you should not be using ustedes, but rather vosotros, but I guess if you're in the Americas you would use ustedes for familiar, plural use. My stupidity.

So let's say your tú (ti) has to be wrong. If you are using ustedes (plural), you should not sign off with the singular tú (ti) but with the plural ustedes.

for the surprising part, I meant like: It will surprise you that... And my teacher wants us to start with Les sorprendera que... Do I use it correctly? Thank you! - SorrowSun, Feb 6, 2011