"En esos días, vida estaba bién"

Question

This is a short monologue from a story I'm working on, I was wondering if anyone could edit it. I think it's mostly correct. Thanks!!!

En esos días, vida estaba bién. ¡Dios mio, cómo me faltan! Ella cantaba entonces--no lo sabias, ¿sí? Cantaba con la voz de ángel. Tanta clara, tanta dulce. Pues...no canta nunca más, ni siquiera habla. No ha hecho sonido en una vez larga. Hoy está callada, y probablemente siempre estará asi. Es triste, ¿no? Por supuesto. No ha hecho sonido por años...Mucho ha sucedido en esos años. Cosas buenas y cosas malas. Amigos han venido y han salido. Perdí mucho...pero yo recuerdo cuando la angela cantó.

Answer 1

...estaba bien (no tilde)

Dios mío (con tilde)

estará así (con tilde)

cuando el ángel (con tilde) cantó

Haven't we been throught this before? Doesn't ángel refer to either a man or women (ángela doesn't exist for this context)?

Thanks! - bailarina95, Dec 1, 2010

You may have been through angel/a before, but this is definitely a first for me. Thanks again though, this is really helpful! - bailarina95, Dec 1, 2010

I was asking for confirmation. I wasn't sure if I was remembering it correctly. - 0074b507, Dec 1, 2010

Answer 2

In response to your question, I enjoyed reading the passage. It reminds me of a soliloquy from a dramatic presentation. If placed in the proper context, I believe it could be effective.

I suspect writing is a catharsis for you. Go for it!

Answer 3

Also, just out of curiousity, how is it? It's an excerpt, so it may not make sense, but should I keep writing or not? Honesty is appreciated, I take criticism well.