"Me llamo Sarah. Yo soy de Venzeuela"

Question

May you please check my sentence construction if it correct.? thanks.

Me llamo Sarah. Yo soy de Venzeuela. Yo soy moderna independiente y sofisticada. Tambien, yo soy persona timida. Yo soy optimista estudiante Me gusta tocar el piano y eschuchar la musica clasica por la noche. Yo estusio Frances por la tarde este semstre. Yo estudio espanol clase son las cinco por la tarde este semstre. Yo estudio computacion por la manana. Yo estudio mucho este semstre. Yo estudio todos lasdias este semstre.. Yo neccessito un diccionario y un cuaderno. Yo tengo un papel y una mochila y libros. Neccesito comprar un diccionarion.

this sentence says: I have a bag and books and pen. ( Yo tengo un papel y una mochila y libros.)

Answer 1

Hi, Sarah. Welcome to the forum. You don't need to use a personal pronoun unless 1) there would be some confusion about who the subject is; or 2) you want to emphasis the subject.

Me llamo Sarah. Yo soy de Venzeuela. Yo soy moderna,independiente y sofisticada. También, Yo soy una persona tímida. Yo soy un estuidiante optimista. Me gusta tocar el piano y esc--uchar la música clasica por la noche. Yo Este semstre estudio francés por la tarde. Yo y tengo clases de español también. Yo estudio computacion ? por la manana. Yo estudio mucho este semstre. Yo estudio todos los dias. este semstre. Yo Necesitoun diccionario y un cuaderno. Yo tengo un papel, y una mochila y libros.

That's what I was saying, great minds think alike!! Also the words in both italics and bold were spelled incorrectly. I missed a few, thanks chica!! :) - Jason7R, Nov 2, 2010

Answer 2

Me llamo Sarah. Yo soy de Venzeuela.

Sarah, you only say "Yo soy..." if you are going to continue saying something like "... y ella es de México", ie. when you are making a contrast: "I am... and he is...." or "I am... but she is..." If you don't intend to do that, that "yo" is very confusing, and if you use it in every sentence, it sounds like you are trying to be annoyingly repetitive and redundant -I know that is not what you are trying to do-. If I had to translate what you have written into English so it gave the same impression you get in Spanish, it would be something like this:

My name is Sarah. I am, unlike others, from Venezuela. I am, unlike others, modern, independent and sophisticated, Also, unlike others, I am a shy person. I, unlike others, like to play piano and listen... I, unlike others, study French.... I, unlike others, study Spanish... unlike others, unlike others, unlike others, unlike others...

Actually, I think that repeating "unlike others" 30 times in English does not sound as bad as saying "yo" all the time. If you have been told that "yo" is optional, you have been told a TOTAL lie. Surely you can say "unlike others" in every single sentence in English, if you want, but how long before people ask you to please stop repeating that annoying and absurd phrase in every single sentence? We do not talk like that and it sounds extremely bad. We use "yo" when we want to say something about us which, unlike others, is like so and so. If no "unlike others" is intended, "yo" should be dropped.

I knew the first part of why not to use the "yo" form but the "unlike others" part was new to me. Thanks again for the lesson!! :) - Jason7R, Nov 2, 2010

I doesn't have to be "unlike others", but there will be other or others who are implicitly being taken into account for a contrast between you and them, or when you include yourself as one more of a larger group, but "yo" is used with others in mind. - lazarus1907, Nov 2, 2010

Answer 3

Me llamo Sarah. Yo soy de Venzeuela. Yo soy moderna independiente y sofisticada. Tambien, yo soy persona timida. Yo soy optimista estudiante Me gusta tocar el piano y eschuchar la musica clasica por la noche. Yo estusio Frances por la tarde este semstre. Yo estudio espanol clase son las cinco por la tarde este semstre. Yo estudio computacion por la manana. Yo estudio mucho este semstre. Yo estudio todos lasdias este semstre.. Yo neccessito un diccionario y un cuaderno. Yo tengo un papel y una mochila y libros. Neccesito comprar un diccionarion.
The things that are in bold I would remove (it's not necessary to use "yo" when talking about yourself, it's redundant when using the verb in the "yo" form) and the things that are in italics and bold...check again. I hope this guides and directs you in the right direction. Good luck!!

I saw two more things. :) - Jason7R, Nov 2, 2010

thanks a lot. gracias - lonelysarah, Nov 3, 2010