I need help to know if is correct this parragraph....plzz thx Pame...
El topic sentence is: The worst meal experience i ever had.. I had a terrible meal experience 2 years ago. First it was a terrible rainy and cold day. On my lunch break my friend and I went to the restaurant and ordered some chicken soup. Then the waiter came up to us with our soup but the soup was cold and too salty, i was in such a hurry that i burned my lips and hands. After we finished our meal i had to go back to work but I didnt feel good, I felt that something was wrong ... When i got work i had to ask my boss if i could go home earlier... Finally i figure out that soup wasnt really fresh . I hope i never have a day as bad as the one i had years ago.
3 Answers
I didn't feel WELL
When I got TO work I had to ask my boss if I could go home EARLY
I figured out that THE soup wasn't VERY fresh
Otherwise mostly good. How did you burn yourself if the soup was cold?
The topic sentence is: The worst meal experience I ever had.
I had a terrible meal experience two years ago. First, it was a terrible, cold and rainy day. On my lunch break, my friend and I went to a restaurant and ordered some chicken soup. When the waiter came up to us with our soup, it was cold and too salty. I was in such a hurry that I burned my lips and hands. After we finished our meal, I had to go back to work, but I didn't feel well. I felt that something was wrong. When I got to work, I had to ask my boss if I could go home early. I finally realized that the soup wasn't very fresh. I hope I never have another day as bad as that one I had years ago.
How did you burn yourself on cold soup?
Pretty good. Just a few things ...
It was a terribly rainy day (adverb).
You should capitalize "I", in English we do not use "i".
Also contractions "dont" and "wasnt" require the apostrophe, so they should be "don't" (means "do not") and "wasn't" (means "was not").
Finally, I figured out ... (past participle here).
