Is this paragaph correct?

Question

I would like to tell my Spanish teacher I watched Jurassic Park in Spanish. I came up with this and would like some corrections before I tell her! Thank you!

Hola! Queria decirte mire Jurrasic Park en espanol! Fue muy divertido. Mi familia mirieron algun, pero mi hermano no le gusto porque no sabe espanol. Yo comprendi mucho. Mi familiar y yo nos gusto 'No dijiste la palabra majica'. Pense que te va a gustar.

(I know all the accents are missing, but I couldn't figure out how to put them in.)

Answer 1

¡Hola! ¡Quería decirte que vi Jurrasic Park en español! Fue muy divertido. Mi familia también lo vio, pero a mi hermano no le gustó porque no sabe espanol. Yo comprendí mucho. A mi familia y a mí nos gustó 'No dijiste la palabra mágica'. Pensé que te iba a gustar.

If you want I'll give you some links, but unless you use the proper grammar with the right method (a rare combination), or you read and listen for a long time until you are familiar with several dozens of thousands of constructions, most of what you will produce will be hardly understandable, and grammatically incorrect. If it makes you feel better, some attempts at translating from English to Spanish can be from 30% to 90% successful (roughly), but 0% to 40% (roughly again) in Japanese. The moral of the story? Stop translating! You need to get some input and be able to imitate and duplicate Spanish expressions before you can make your own. Translating from English will only result in 99% foreign (if not incomprehensible) gargle, at best.

Your next task? Read, read a lot, and listen to the radio and the TV like there is no tomorrow. Then, once you are familiar to how Spanish should sound, try to speak.

Don't take it bad. If the smartest person in Spain tried to write in English using the method you are using (ie. translating almost word by word), the result would be a monumental joke -at best- or a pile of (rotten) potatoes.

Thank you very much! - barefootwalker91, Sep 7, 2010

Answer 2

Hola! Quiero decirte que mire Jurrasic Park en espanol! Fue muy divertido. Mi familia miró algo, pero mi hermano no le gusto porque no sabe espanol. Yo comprendi mucho. A mi familia y a mí nos gusto 'No dijiste la palabra mágica'. Pienso que te va a gustar.

Good job. It helps if you put the English of what you're trying to say, also. I would leave out the Yo. Usually you don't use the subject pronouns if they can be inferred from the context.