Lyrics translation? "La Inquietud"
Hey! I was wondering if I could have a little help translating these lyrics..? I've managed a fair bit myself, and what I have translated sounds lovely, but would love to really be able to understand the whole song - any help is greatly appreciated 
(I am finding it hard to find a suitable translation for the line "Y se extiende por mí una calma que va… " in particular
muchas gracias
SONG: LA INQUIETUD (BY NEK)
"Cuando cae la noche yo me siento aquí, libre va mi mente a volar, y así miro el universo, siento su latido es un cielo inmenso, donde estoy metido.
Y se extiende por mí una calma que va…
Sobre las cosas, sobre la espera, sobre tí, sobre mí, por mis defensas. Sobre las cosas, manos cerradas, crece así, siento aquí la inquietud en mí.
De noche cuando el viento mueve fantasías, sigo las señales de la vida mía, el silencio dentro no me asusta ya, de sus ramas cuelgo la melancolía.
Así se extiende por mí esta calma que va…
Sobre las cosas, sobre la espera, sobre tí, sobre mí, por mis defensas. Sobre las cosas, manos vencidas, crece así, siento aquí la inquietud en mí.
El alba me dibuja, dice ahora sí y mis esperanzas las encuentro aquí.
Sobre las cosas, largas esperas, sobre ti, sobre mí, del universo. Y cuando en ti pienso, en ti me siento, barres tú, vida mía, la inquietud en mí, la inquietud en mí.
La inquietud en mí, la inquietud en mí."
What do you think? I particularly love the line "es un cielo inmenso, donde estoy metido"
5 Answers
Cuando cae la noche yo me siento aquí, libre va mi mente a volar, y así miro el universo, siento su latido, es un cielo inmenso donde estoy metido -- When night falls, I sit here, my mind flies free, and so I watch the universe, I feel your heartbeat, it’s an immense sky where I am stuck (I don't think that metido is exactly "stuck" but more "placed into" which doesn't sound good here. I'd probably go for a loose translation like It's an immense sky that surrounds me)
‘sobre las cosas, sobre la espera, sobre ti, sobre mí, por mis defensas’ --and a calm spreads through me that goes over things, over the wait, over you, over me’ ’through my defenses
‘sobre las cosas, manos cerradas, crece así, siento aquí, la inquietud en mí’ --over the things, closed hands, it grows like this, here I feel, the anxiety (or restlessness) in me
‘de noche cuando el viento mueve fantasías, sigo las señales de la vida mía, el silencio dentro no me asusta ya, de sus ramas cuelgo la melancolía’ At night when the wind moves fantasies, I follow the signs of my life, the silence within doesn't frighten me anymore, from its branches I hang the melancholy
‘el alba me dibuja, dice ahora sí, y mis esperanzas las encuentro aquí’ --dawn outlines me (or maybe "reveals me" would sound better), It tells me yes now, and my hopes I find them here
sobre las cosas, largas esperas, sobre ti, sobre mí, del universo.’ --over the things, long waits, over you, over me, from the universe
‘y cuando en ti pienso, en ti me siento, barres tú, vida mía, la inquietud en mí’ ---and when I think of you, I feel myself in you, you, my dear, sweep awaythe anxiety (restlessness) in me’
Nice job. I enjoyed listening to the song, too.
I feel your heartbeat, it’s an immense sky where I am stuck (I think it's the heartbeat of the universe that's being referred to because they do not use the formal with the person, so 'I feel it's heartbeat' where I am stuck - doesn't sound poetic to me, why not just 'I am on the inside of an immense sky' (some ideas foryou)
Y se extiende por mí una calma que va sobre las cosas...- and a calm spreads through me that goes over things...Do post what you've translated and I'll try to come back and help you with it. Welcome to the forum.
HERE IS AN EXTENSION TO MY QUESTION: WHAT I HAVE SO FAR TRANSLATED MYSELF SORRY IT'S SO LONG!
Ok, so here is what I have been able to do so far (though it may not be completely correct!):
Cuando cae la noche yo me siento aquí, libre va mi mente a volar, y así miro el universo, siento su latido, es un cielo inmenso donde estoy metido -- When night falls, I sit here, my mind is free to fly, and so I watch the universe, I feel your heartbeat, it’s an immense sky where I am stuck
Thank you very much alba3 for translating ‘y se extiende por mí una calma que va sobre las cosas’ -that makes so much more sense that my translation!
So then with that added to the chorus,
‘sobre las cosas, sobre la espera, sobre ti, sobre mí, por mis defensas’ --and a calm spreads through me that goes over things, over the wait, over you, over me’ but as for ‘por mis defensas’ I’m not sure ‘por’ means in this instance…’for my defences’ doesn’t seem quite right…
‘sobre las cosas, manos cerradas, crece así, siento aquí, la inquietud en mí’ --over the things, closed hands, ______, here I feel, the anxiety in me
‘de noche cuando el viento mueve fantasías, sigo las señales de la vida mía, el silencio dentro no me asusta ya, de sus ramas cuelgo la melancolía’ --(again, I’m not quite sure here, but something along these lines…) At night when the wind moves fantasies, follow the signs of my life, the silence within I am not afraid, from its branches hang melancholy (yes, you can see I got rather confused for those couple of lines!)
‘el alba me dibuja, dice ahora sí, y mis esperanzas las encuentro aquí’ --dawn drags me, tell me yes now, and my hopes ________’ (little confused there too!)
‘sobre las cosas, largas esperas, sobre ti, sobre mí, del universo.’ --over the things, long waits, over you, over me, of the universe
Not sure about ‘y cuando en ti pienso, en ti me siento, barres tú, vida mía, la inquietud en mí’ ---and when I think of you, I feel myself in you, you sweep away my life, the anxiety in me’
Afraid that was rather long, but oh well. Thank you ever so much to anyone who has so much as sat here and read through that, sparing a little of their time If you feel you are able to offer a little help - a correction/better translation - for absolutely any part, it would be greatly appreciated if you left an answer below! And thank you to those who have already helped me, too.
Some of it is in italics, but I'm not sure why, and I cannot get it to go back to 'normal'. oops...apologies!
Why don't you post what you've translated up to now and we check it all together?
