Writing a poem for my "husband"
So far things are no better: I have started another poem for him....or just about him. It helps my venting. Thanks for all support!
Mis primeros recuerdos
de tu eran cariñosos
eras mi mejor amigo
luego se convirtió
en mi amante; sus brazos
eran mis dulces abrazos.
Ahora tu respiración es tóxico
espontáneos lagrimos
fluye de los ojos.
Crees que escupir m****(adj. ending in o/os)**
*Here I am trying to say "you think you spit awesome S@@t *
It is a work in progress and the Spanish is childlike, I know. But I never claimed to be a poet 
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Mis primeros recuerdos
de ti eran cariñosos
eras mi mejor amigo
luego te convertiste (we need to have consistency here - either the poem is about him, or it is addressed to him. I'm changing it so that it is addressed to him.
en mi amante; tus brazos
eran mis dulces abrazos.
Ahora tu respiración es tóxica
espontáneos lagrimas
fluyen de mis ojos.
Crees que tus inmundos escupitajos (just one option, less prone to censorship, and it rhymes)...
I'm not offereing any major improvements. I'm just correcting your mistakes so that we can work with it from here. 
