My unnamed fiction story

Question

Here's the prologue of my action/adventure story; I could use any proofreading or edits that you think are necessary. Just comment on the things I should change, that's all I'm asking. The first chapter to anything, I'm generally not very good at writing. So it gets better. And most people I share this with are surprised because they think a girl can't write action.

Thank you!

-----Prologue------

There’re a few things that almost every teenager, at some point in his life or another, thinks about his parents.

1: They don’t understand me.

2: They don’t love me.

3: They are completely different then me.

Most of the time, these thoughts aren't true. Of course they understand you; they went though mostly the same things you did when they were kids. Of course they love you; they don’t kill you every time you tick them off, do they? They don’t let you get away with doing bad things though, do they? And of course they're pretty close to what you are; I mean, they're human, right? They look a lot like you, right?

Well, in my case, each one of these thoughts are true. My name is Creed McCarthy, and this is the story of my life.

much better - 00494d19, May 14, 2010

It is very good, a few small things,drop "or another " not needed, 3 "than me " . last line- each one of "those ' thoughts , hope you do not mind my comments. - ray76, May 14, 2010

I would say, "they went through most of the same...." each one of these thoughts is true. Each one is the subject. Of these thoughts is a prepositional phrase modigying it. - Delores--Lindsey, May 14, 2010

Make that modifying it...LOL - Delores--Lindsey, May 14, 2010

Answer 1

Hi Moany! Well I can see that sometimes you make contractions but not always where's possible There're a few... They are completely... so if in the kind of literature you're writting, all possible contractions are mandatory or there wouldn't be anyone? Thanks for clarifying.