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Please, could you check my project, is important to use the adjective clauses

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                          MY GOOD FRIEND

My good friend, who lives in Huancayo, was my confident went I was a little girl, now I have other good friend, who is my daughter, I live with her and we help each other. Yesterday, I bought a dress for her, which was exactly how she wanted, because was her aniversary. My daughter whose job is hard come too late to home almost every night and I worry for her security but she always tell me: calm mom don´t worry. Despite that I am much older than her, I consider that she is really my best friend. I remember three years ago, went I had a great problem was her who helped me to succeed. Her young spirit and her fortitude which are values that together with me that I have the live experience we are complement to succeed. Besides, when we have a disagreement, do not go bed angry. Always make up before we fall asleep. I considering that my daugther who is my friend is a great person and I am proud for her.

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updated FEB 11, 2010
posted by maylegoas

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Deleted because it did not all get posted to the question's thread. If I have time later, I will retry. The system did not cooperate and I could not leave my work badly done.

updated FEB 11, 2010
edited by Moe
posted by Moe
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Your essay is very nice and it is wonderful to hear you say such nice things about your daughter. I made a couple of changes - take a look and see if you agree with the changes. I tried not to change the meaning of your sentences.

My good friend, who lives in Huancayo, was my confident when I was a little girl. Now I have another good friend, who is my daughter. We live togetherand help each other. Yesterday I bought a dress for her, which was exactly what she wanted because itwas her anniversary. My daughter, whose job is hard (maybe use demanding instead of hard), comes home too late almost every night and I worry for her safety but she always tells me to stay calm and not to worry. Despite being much older then her, I consider her my best friend . I remember three years ago, when I had a great problem, she helped me to overcome it andsucceed. Her young spirit and her fortitude are values that together with me that I have the live experience we are complement to succeed (This sentence needs a bit of help but I am not certain what you want to say) When we have a disagreement, wedo not go bed angry but always make up before we fall asleep. I consider my daughter my friend. Sheis a great person and I am proud of her.

updated FEB 11, 2010
posted by alice_m
Thank you Alice, I am trying to use the adjective clauses with relative pronouns. The sentence needs a bit of help , I tell you in spanish: Su espíritu joven y su fortaleza son valores que junto conmigo que tengo la experiencia... sorry but there´s no sp - maylegoas, FEB 11, 2010
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