Please, could you check my project, is important the passive
My country is PERU and I am proud that our Minister of Energy and Mines told that In Latin America, Perú is the best producer of silver, gold, lead, zinc, bismuth, Indian, tellurium, and the richest deposits are found in the Peruvian Andes.
Other product which we can fell proud is the cotton was borned in Perú. The pre-Inca and Inca cultures were used this fiber in their clothing, In Perú in this time just was cultivated the different Pima varieties as tanguis, native and the hill.
And the Llama, the vicuña and the Alpaca are other of the worth mentionated in Perú, The Llama was the animal more linked with the Peruvian Andes
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I was born in Peru, and I was filled with pride when it was announced by our Minister of Energy and Mines that, in Latin America, Peru is the leading producer of silver, gold, lead, zinc, bismuth, Indian, tellurium, and that the richest deposits of these metals are found in the Peruvian Andes.
Another product, of which we can feel proud, is cotton, which originated in Peru. Cotton fiber was used by the pre-Incan and Incan cultures for their clothing. At that time, only the various Pima varieties -- such as tanguis, native, and hill -- were cultivated.
Also, the llama, the vicuña, and the alpaca are others worth mentioning. The llama has been linked most to the Peruvian Andes.
Only the parts in bold are in passive, and only those parts were easy to put into passive voice. But, without full details of your assignment, I cannot know if what I wrote helps you or not. Passive voice can usually be identified by this pattern:
{some form of "to be"} + {past participle}
- am encouraged
- are built
- was swallowed
- has been rejected
The passive voice is a pattern in which the subject of the sentence receives the action of the verb. This is in contrast to the active voice, in which the subject performs the action of the verb. Also, in passive voice, the agent performing the action can be indicated as the object of the preposition by. It is optional to include the agent or not.
Examples:
- (active voice) The workers are building the road.
- (passive voice, with agent) The road is being built by the workers.
- (passive voice, without agent) The road is being built.
Note that the tense of the passive construction is determined by the tense of the form of to be. In the first example, the verb is are building, which is in present progressive. So, to make the passive voice match, we put the verb to be in present progressive (is being) and then add the past participle of the active verb (built).
Not every time you see the verb to be does it mean that the sentence is in passive voice. For instance, in the sentence I was proud, was (past tense of to be) is merely acting as a linking verb. But, also notice that proud is not a past participle, rather it is an adjective.
I am proud that our Minister of Energy and Mines told that In Latin America,
I am proud that our Minister of Energy and Mines declares that...
- to declare seems the best translation in this case
richest deposits are found in the Peruvian Andes
richest deposit which are found in the Peruvian Andes
- the sobordinate clause should use 'which' in this case to tie in the list of all the products and where they can be found
Other product which we can fell proud is the cotton was borned in Perú
Another product in which we have pride is cotton which is cultivated in Perú
tener orgullo = to have pride in; instead of having 'born' crops, you cultivate crops (as you have used this word correctly later)
The pre-Inca and Inca cultures were used this fiber in their clothing,
The Incan and Pre-Incan cultures used this fiber in their clothing,
Sounds better to have in this order: Incan and Pre-Ican, pluse the 'n' designates an ajective, the past tense is simple preterite (no need to perfect tense)
In Perú in this time just was cultivated the different Pima varieties as tanguis, native and the hill.
[In Perú] During this period, just the different varieties such as tanguis, native and the hill were cultivated.
No need for two prepositional phrases at the begining of this sentence, plus, you've been talking about Perú the whole time. )
And the Llama, the vicuña and the Alpaca are other of the worth mentionated in Perú,
Llamas, Vicuñas and Alpacas are other resources worth mentioning in Perú,
In general, when talking about collective nouns such as animals, there's no need for the direct articles, I used resources to to attribute to the three different kinds of animals, (worth metniong is a gerund clause acting as a predicate nomnitve)
The Llama was the animal more linked with the Peruvian Andes
The Llama is the animal most linked with the Peruvian Andes
- Llamas are extinct? talk about them in the present tense; Also, use the superlative most
My country is
We would normally say I am from Peru.
I am proud that our Minister of Energy and Mines told that ...
told us that... or said that...
and the richest deposits are found in the Peruvian Andes.
and that the richest....
You are joining two subordinate clauses beginning with that. He told us [that ...] and [that....].
Other product which we can fell proud is the cotton was borned in Perú.
Another product of which...feel ...cotton which originated [you wouldn't use was born with plants].
The pre-Inca and Inca cultures were used this fiber in their clothing,
The pre-Inca and Inca cultures were used this fiber in their clothing,...
The pre-Inca and Inca cultures were using this fiber in their clothing,...
In Perú in this time
In Peru at this time
And the Llama, the vicuña and the Alpaca are other of the worth mentionated in Perú,
And the llama, the vicuña and the alpaca are others** worth mentioning** from Peru,
Avoid starting sentences with conjunctions like and or but.
The Llama was the animal more linked with the Peruvian Andes
The llama was the animal most linked with...(of the 3).
Interesting comment about the use of cotton in clothing originating in Peru. Is it older than Egyptian cotton?
What a wonderful selection of answers.
I am certainly not going to try to better any of them 
I just wanted to say how impressed I am with the explanations 
