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I have to write a composition in Spanish about problems in the environment. I have it fully written, I am just wondering if it's done correctly. Any help would be greatly appreciated.

¡Gracias!


¡Contaminación es una problema grande! Algunas personas no botan basura. La cantidad de contaminación es una tragedia. Tenemos resolvar la problema de contaminación. Si resolvamos la problema podemos mejorar la calidad del arie, la calidad de la agua, y la calidad de la tierra. Resolvar la problema es necesario que reciclemos. Tenemos reciclar alumino, botellas, papel, y plástico. Es importante que evitemos destres como derrames de petóleo tambien. Si evitamos desatres podemos protegaer los animales y la Tierra. En mi opinión contaminación es una delincuencia. Quiero luchar contaminación, pero no puede hacerlo solo.


Now, this is what I was attempting to write:

Pollution is a big problem! Some people don't throw away garbage. The amount of pollution is a tragedy. We have to resolve the problem of pollution. If we resolve the problem, we can improve the quality of the air, the quality of the water, and the quality of the land. To resolve the problem it's necessary that we recycle. We have to recycle aluminum, bottles, paper, and plastic. It's important that we avoid disasters like oil spills also. If we avoid disasters, we can protect the animals and the Earth. In my opinion pollution is a crime. I want to fight pollution, but I can't do it alone.


Yeah, it might be a bit corny, but in this class it would get the job done if it's correct.

Thanks!

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updated Nov 27, 2009
posted by eZACke

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Ok I kept it nice and simple the way you had it.

¡La contaminación es un gran problema! Algunas personas no botan la basura. La cantidad de contaminación es una tragedia. Tenemos que resolver el problema de la contaminación. Si resolvemos estos problemas, podremos mejorar la calidad del aire, la calidad del agua, y la calidad de la tierra. Para resolver este problema es necesario que reciclemos. Tenemos que reciclar aluminio, botellas, papel, y plástico. Es importante que evitemos desastres como derrames de petróleo también. Si evitamos estos desastres podremos proteger los animales y la Tierra. En mi opinión la contaminación es un crimen. Quiero luchar contra la contaminación, pero no puedo hacerlo solo.

updated Nov 27, 2009
edited by 0068e2f4
posted by 0068e2f4
crimen es masculino. - 00f2b5a1, Nov 27, 2009
Yeah, I missed that one Fran - 0068e2f4, Nov 27, 2009
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Contaminación es una problema grande

I would think that it might be better said: Contaminación es un gran problema

Tenemos resolver el problema de...


...podemos mejorar la calidad del arie...

Corrigame si estoy equivocado pero pienso que necesita usar la condicional: ...podríamos mejorar la calidad del arie....

o el futuro:

...podremos mejorar la calidad del arie....

updated Nov 27, 2009
edited by Izanoni1
posted by Izanoni1
No es "un gran problema" o "un problema grande"? - 00f2b5a1, Nov 27, 2009
You are correct...I was not done editing my post...sorry for the confusion. - Izanoni1, Nov 27, 2009
In any event, I am going to stop here as Roberto has already done a fine job of proofreading for him - Izanoni1, Nov 27, 2009
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podemos --- we are able

podremos --- we will be able

updated Nov 27, 2009
posted by 0068e2f4
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Delincuencia is more like petit crime. Contamination is a crime done by big industries as well as individuals. The word crime gives it a larger scope.

updated Nov 27, 2009
posted by 0068e2f4
crimen - 0068e2f4, Nov 27, 2009
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I think they call them impersonal nouns...anyway, it is different in Spanish.

Sorry I can't explain the grammar.

updated Nov 27, 2009
posted by 0068e2f4
darn terminology - 0068e2f4, Nov 27, 2009
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One last thing: You replaced my "podemos" with "podremos". What is that?

Oh, and why can't I use delincuencia as crime?

updated Nov 27, 2009
edited by eZACke
posted by eZACke
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Question: Why do you have to put "La" before contaminación? It's not saying "the pollution", it's just saying "pollution"?

updated Nov 27, 2009
posted by eZACke
It's because you are referring to the concept of pollution as a whole and when you refer to conceptual nouns like this you use the definite article - Izanoni1, Nov 27, 2009
gracias - eZACke, Nov 27, 2009
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Anyone?

updated Nov 27, 2009
posted by eZACke
When you make comments on your own posts before somebody has had a chance to look at it, you are dimishing the chances of someone looking at it. - 0068e2f4, Nov 27, 2009
Lo siento - eZACke, Nov 27, 2009
No problem, just trying to help you out - 0068e2f4, Nov 27, 2009