Proof-read my composition please!

Question

Hi there! For my University Spanish class I have to write an autobography using el pretérito, el imperfecto, y el verbo 'hacer' en experciones temporales. Usually I would go to my professor to proof-read it, but I found that by posting it here, I actually get better feedback and corrections! I know this is surprising, but she usually rushes through it. So with that said, any help would be appreciated! Muchas gracias!

I apologize in advance for the length! (I've also replaced the names of places with "somewhere", so don't mind those!)

Nací el quince de agosto de mil novecientos noventa y uno en "Somewhere". Cuando yo tenía cinco años, después de mis padres se divorciaron, me mudé de "Somewhere" a la gran ciudad de "Somewhere else", y he vivido allí desde entonces. Yo había sido un niño solo toda mi vida hasta este año pasado, cuando mi padre y su esposa adoptaron una asombrosa niña de 3 años de edad. En un instante me convertí en una hermana mayor. Es una responsabilidad muy emocionante tener y espero ser un buen ejemplo.

Mirando hacia atrás, puedo decir que tuve una infancia muy buena. Siempre era un buen alumno, y valoro el conocimiento que gané en escuela y aparte de ello. Aunque un gran parte de mi familia está lejos, siempre han sido de apoyo, y con un director para una madre,¡había manera de que yo haría mal en la escuela!

Aparte de la escuela, era involucrado en un montón de actividades, la mayoría de las cuales, dejé lamentablemente. Jugaba al fútbol, cantaba en el coro, y tomaba clases de piano (aunque nunca fui demasiado interesados en prácticando). Tengo, sin embargo, he seguido con la danza y la actuación, y no puedo imaginarme los dejando

Cuando era un niña, siempre me pregunté qué iba a ser en el futuro. Recuerdo cuando era tiempo de empezar a pensar en la Universidad, tuve un ataque de pánico pequeño. Hacía semanas que me cambiando mi mente hasta que me sentí confiando con mi decisión. No me van a creer, pero soy terrible en la toma de decisiones.

Todas cosas consideraron, estoy muy agradecido por las experiencias que he tenido en la vida, tanto positivos como negativos, porque sin ellos, no sería la persona que soy hoy.

Answer 1

I changed your category for you. I am not at the skill level to offer corrections but the text seemed comprehensible to me

Answer 2

So there are no corrections anyone can make? lol. It's perfect?!

Answer 3

Hi there! I completely agree! Whenever someone proof-reads my work, I always make sure I understand why they changed it, and also how it makes sense in the context. I learn more on this website than I do in class. I watch every video on here that pertains to the lesson we're doing in class because unfortunately, my prof doesn't teach very well. But I guess that's University for you! I will definitely post what I'm meaning to say in English! Thanks for all of your help!

En Inglés:

I was born on August 15th, 1991 in "Somwhere". When I was 5, after my parents divorced, I moved from "Somewhere" to the big city of "Somewhere else", and have lived there every since. I had been an only child my whole life up until this past year when my dad and his wife adopted an amazing 3 year old girl. In an instant I became and older sister. It is a very exciting responsibility to have and I hope to be a good example.

Looking back, I can say that I had a very good childhood. I was always a good student, and I can truly say that I value the experiences I gained both in school and outside of it. Though a lot of my family is far away, they have always been supportive, and with a principal for a mother, there was no way I was ever going to do poorly in school!

Ouside of school, I was involved in a lot of activities, most of which I regrettably quit. I used to play soccer, sing in a choir, and take piano lessons (though I was never too keen on practicing). I have, however, stuck with dance and acting, and I could never image giving them up.

When I was a child, I always thought about what I would be in the future.I remember when it was time to start thinking about college, I had a small panic attack. I changed my mind for week until i felt confident with my ultimate decision. (I realize I need to add in 'ultimate' or 'final') You may not believe me (I realize I need to change this sentence as well), but I'm terrible at making decisions.

Looking back, I am very grateful for the experiences I have had in life, both positive and negative, because without them, I wouldn’t be the person I am today.

Answer 4

Hi Welcome I see that you have made a couple of posts! We are so happy to see that you liked the site! I am also a student and post lengthy papers. One thing that you could do that would help us give you a more accurate answer would be to also give us what you are wanting to say in English.

This way the paper is still in your words and not the words of somebody else. I currently have a professor that is worried that I may be cheating because my papers have improved so much from the beginning of the semester. The truth of the matter is that my Spanish has improved. Yes, I have my papers proofread, but I also learn from my mistakes; I do not merely copy down others suggestions, I think about them and take all of the suggestions and combine them to form a sentence that I understand!!

Just a thought for you!!

I am working on a power point for my Spanish class tomorrow or I would help you out tonight....I promise to always do what I can though!!