Proof read my "About Me"!
Ok, I attempted to create a short, bilingual "About Me" section. I'd appreciate if you could correct my Spanish, so it gets the idea of the English version across without me looking so wet behind the ears. ¡Gracias!
I'm a nursing student hoping to become somewhat proficient in Spanish! I love my beautiful wife Shannon.
Soy estudiante de enfermería. Espero hacerse proficiente a hablando español. Le amo mi esposa bonita, Shannon.
3 Answers
Espero hacerme proficiente...
False friend! "Proficiente", an extremely unusual word in Spanish, means "that makes profit", and not "skilled and knowledgeable". "Proficient" is translated as "competente", and it is used more for jobs, not for your language skills.
Which sounds better? La amo a Shannon, mi esposa bonita.
"Mi esposa bonita" is the direct object, not the indirect one, so you simply can't include the D.O. pronoun as well. So, "le" and "la" are grammatically incorrect here.
Soy estudiante de enfermería. Espero hacerse proficiente a hablando español. Le amo mi esposa bonita, Shannon.
The word "become" cannot be translated literally using a single verb. Here, I'd use "llegar a + infinitive", and of course, I'd rephrase the whole thing to make it sounds Spanish.
Soy estudiante de enfermería. Espero llegar a hablar español con fluidez. Amo mi preciosa esposa, Shannon.
Which sounds better? La amo a Shannon, mi esposa bonita.
In my opinion. it sounds better to say : Amo a mi bonita esposa Shannon (I love my beautiful wife Shannon). In this case, you can also put the adjective (beautiful,pretty) before the noun (wife) as in English. (It sounds good to me). 
Since someone just corected me yesterday on this error I'll pass on my new knowledge to you.
Espero hacerme proficiente...
...a hablar español.
Which sounds better? La amo a Shannon, mi esposa bonita.
