Me llamo Anthony y soy joven, inteligente y bajo

Question

(English in brackets, Español without brackets)

(Ok these are two very basic sentences [and they don't make any actual sense, but I'm just trying to put them down], but please keep in mind I only started Español a couple of days ago, so I'm still on the basics [and I don't trust the automated translators!].)

Perdone señor. Buenos noches. Me llamo Anthony y soy joven, inteligente y bajo. ¿Como está? Adiós.
(Excuse me sir. Good Evening. My name is Anthony and I'm young, intelligent and short. How are you? Goodbye.)

Ella es gorda, desordenada y mayor.
(She is fat, unorganized and old.)

(Sorry about the ridiculous sentences [especially the one above, I don't have anything better to say at the moment]; my Spanish vocabulary isn't the greatest yet but I know much more than I did 3 days ago.)

Any help and feedback is greatly appreciated!

Edit: Whoops, I think I posted this in the wrong section. Sorry. :(

Answer 1

Thanks everyone for the feedback (notes that Buenos/Buenas are different, I didn't realise).

I will definately try some more positive adjectives next time. Those sentences weren't too nice now that I think about it.

woajiaorobert, you'd be surprised how much your post has helped me with your basic use of words like "que" and "una" and I'll definately use gruesa in the future instead.

Answer 2

A few mistakes (as the others have pointed out) but very good for only a couple days of Spanish. I am taking Spanish 1 in school right now, and I'm almost finished with the class. I have learned SO MUCH in a matter of months. Just stick with it. If you ever need any help, send me a message.

Answer 3

Perdone señor. Buenas noches. Me llamo Anthony y soy joven, inteligente y bajo. ¿Cómo está? Adiós.

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Answer 4

Carlos, I changed your title to a meaningful one to enable later searches.

Answer 5

Ella es delgada, ordenada y joven.

I feel like Ninoska, you should have taken her and me as an example:

Ellas son jóvenes, guapas, altas, atractivas, inteligentes, listas, trabajadoras, delgadas, tiposas......

Just to give you an idea...

Answer 6

Ella es gorda, desordenada y mayor de edad.

(mayor de edad)- adult, of age, of legal age.

Ella es una persona mayor.

She is an older person.

Ella es gorda, desordenada y mayor que Juan.

(mayor que Juan)- older than Juan.

A better word than gorda (more polite) is gruesa.

Gorda means fat, gruesa means heavy set.

positive adjectives:

Ella es delgada, ordenada y joven.

Answer 7

Disculpe o perdone
Buenas (no buenos)
and ...
what if you just point some positive adjectives next time lol