La Revista Negocios Hispanos UsA
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The Hispanic Business Magazine UsA, aims to be the link between the various Latin American communities, and achieve the real power that would strengthen the economic, political and social areas.
It also seeks to create proper representation in all the different Latin American countries and offer entrepreneurs and professionals with a large range of advertising services to market their products and services in the United States.
Currently the U.S. Hispanic Business Magazine, which circulates in the Tri-State area, through its six editions has incorporated sections of countries like Ecuador, Dominican Republic, Colombia, Mexico, Peru, Honduras, El Salvador, Chile, Puerto Rico and Brazil and others that will be included in future editions.
After conducting eight events celebrating the incorporation of the aforementioned countries, the U.S. Hispanic Business Executives has invited them to participate to its first Christmas dinner and celebration of Sections of Puerto Rico and Brazil, an activity to be held in Brasilia Restaurant City Grill in Newark on December 4th at 7:30 pm to be attended by all representatives of Latin American countries, mainly representatives of different municipalities and consulates.
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Hi Robertico, These are the changes I would make.
The Hispanic Business Magazine UsA, aims to be the link between the various Latin American communities in order to achieve the real power that would strengthen the economic, political and social areas.
It also seeks to create proper representation in all the different Latin American countries and offers entrepreneurs and professionals a large range of advertising services to market their products and services in the United States.
Currently the U.S. Hispanic Business Magazine, which circulates in the Tri-State area through its six editions, has incorporated sections of countries such as Ecuador, The Dominican Republic, Colombia, Mexico, Peru, Honduras, El Salvador, Chile, Puerto Rico and Brazil. Additional countries will be included in future editions.
After conducting eight events, celebrating the incorporation of the aforementioned countries, the U.S. Hispanic Business Executives have invited them to participate in its first Christmas Dinner and celebration of Sections of Puerto Rico and Brazil.This is an activity to be held in Brasilia Restaurant City Grill, in Newark on December 4th at 7:30 PM. This event is to be attended by representatives of all Latin American countries, (but) mainly representatives of different municipalities and consulates.
I might say seeks to be the real focus or real focus of power
Are you saying the magazine is available in these various countries or it creates proper representation of these countries? With the next sentence I would think you would use "of". I think that last sentence is really a paragraph and should be broken into a few sentences. ...first Christmas dinner. Will be a celebration of Sections of abc. It will be held at...etc 7:30 pm. Those attending will be......
The Hispanic Business Magazine UsA, Is that the title of the magaizine? Or is it called just UsA? If the title if just UsA, then you don't need the capital letters. The Hispanic business magazine UsA........
Does UsA deliberately use a small "s" in the middle?
....have invited them to participate in its first Christmas Dinner and celebration of Sections of Puerto Rico and Brazil This last bit doesn't make any sense.
The Hispanic Business Magazine UsA -- aims to be the link between -- various Latin American communities -- and achieve the real power...
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and offer entrepreneurs and professionals -- a large range of ...
"seeks to create (...) and (seek to) offer" or "seeks to create (...) and offers"?
the U.S. Hispanic Business Executives have (??) invited them to participate in its first Christmas dinner and celebration of Sections of Puerto Rico and Brazil
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and others -- will be included in future editions
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