Childhood. Could you proofread my Essay?

Question

This is the body and Conclusion of my Essay. (2nd part)

**Opponents of childhood is the best stage in a person's life claim that there are children who born in difficult circumstances such as their parents do not work and falling in drugs, alcohol, prision or simply are repared; therefore these kids must work to help their home; for instance, in our country they work in the Parada Marked, singing in the bus or selling candies; as a result, they are sad kid. However, several times those children have strength to succeed in the life and later are good professionals and having good homes. On the other hand, there are parents responsibles that provide to their children of care, love, and their children go to school where they learn to write, to read, to play, and they have friends, toys, food, and home where to sleep with clean sheets; they are happy children because do not worry anything just to play, to eat and sleep.

It should evident that the arguments against the best stage in a persno's life is his/her childhood is not at all true. On the contrary there are kids whose parents give them care, love and provide to their children of all. Furthermore, Kids with their sad heart is in less percent. In conclusion, I agree that, childhood, in most cases, can be the best stage in a person's life.**

Thanks.

Answer 1

I'll do the first half for you

Opponents of the belief (or statement etc) that childhood is the best stage in a person's life cite the fact that there are children born into difficult circumstances such as having parents who do not work or who abuse drugs or alcohol. Parents who are in prison or who are simply ...(repared???). In such cases they say that the children must work to keep the home functioning. One example would be in our country where children work in the Parada MarkeT, singing in the bus or selling candies and as a result they certainly seem to be sad.

Many of these children, however, show the strength to succeed in life and later become professionals and live in good homes.

• Kiwi_Girl, the second paragraph of this paragraph is it OK? - maylegoas Dec 22, 2011
• the word is not repared is separed - maylegoas Dec 22, 2011
• separated from their children??? - sanlee Dec 22, 2011

Answer 2

Next paragraph. On the other hand, there are responsible parents that provide their children with care and love. Their children go to school where they learn to write, to read and to play. They have friends, toys, food, and a home where they can sleep with clean sheets. They are happy children because they do not worry about anything. They just need to think about playing, eating, and sleeping.

• Thanks sanlee, but the final paragraph? - maylegoas Dec 22, 2011

Answer 3

Therefore, It should evident that the people who say that the best stage of a person's life is not his/her childhood are wrong in many cases. On the contrary, there are kids whose parents give them care and love and provide for their children all that they need.. Furthermore, children with a sad heart make up a small percent of the population. In conclusion, I agree that, childhood, in most cases, can be the best stage in a person's life.**