My future - is this 10 characters yet?

Question

For the practice exams just gone, I had to write a passage about my life, expectations, hopes, dreams, all that sort of stuff. When we got it back the mark I received was Merit (2nd highest mark you can receive), and we (the class) were asked to fix any mistakes we made. I've fixed everything I can, but can't figure out the rest. Any help in fixing up my mistakes - found below - is greatly appreciated. If I have a suggestion as to what it may be I'll put it in brackets, and the English translation underneath. Also, if there is an easier way to say the sentence, feel free to suggest it.

^ = something missing

Italics = something wrong (underlined in the writing)

Thanks,

Ryan

1) [Mi hermana] puede pagar por ^ (los?) viajes para mis padres a europa para visitar a mi.

• My sister can pay for my parents trips to Europe to visit me

2) ... o tener otra cosa para (por?) hacer en mi tiempo libre

• ... or have something else to do in my spare time

3) Para concluir, entre de ahora y 2021 hay mucho que quiero y ^ tengo que hacer.

• To conclude, between now and 2021 there is a lot that I want to and have to do.

4) ... y empezar ^ ahorrar dinero para...

• ... and begin to save money to...

5) ... pero ^ otras cosas (pero los demás?)...

• ... but other things/the rest...

Again, thanks for any help

• Hahahahahahahahahaha 10 characters! - Koalasan May 23, 2011
• :)))) - Gocika May 23, 2011

Answer 1

Johanna is very rude. Isn't viaje feminine? I wd use para before hacer. In 3, tengo que means what you say it means but saying quiero que is not grammatical in Spanish so just use a comma after the word "quiero". 4 seems correct to me, as does 5.

Answer 2

1) [Mi hermana] puede pagar por los pasajes de mis padres a europa para que me visiten.

My sister can pay for my parents trips to Europe to visit me

2) ... o tener otra cosa que hacer en mi tiempo libre

... or have something else to do in my spare time

3) Para concluir, entre de ahora y el 2021 hay mucho que quiero y tengo que hacer.

To conclude, between now and 2021 there is a lot that I want to and have to do.

4) ... y empezar a ahorrar dinero para...

... and begin to save money to...

5) ... pero ^ otras cosas (pero los demás?)... Maybe: "pero lo demás...

... but other things/the rest...  

(This last phrase depends on context, on what exacly you mean to say).