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I would appreciate any feedback/corrections on my fable. Below are the requirements, spanish version, and english version. Thank you!

Requirements: First - Describe characters (animals), physical description and personality. Second – Write 2 or 3 sentences to describe the place. Use imperfect. Third – Write 2 or 3 sentences to explain the problem or conflict between the characters. Use imperfect. Fourth – Write 2 or 3 sentences describing the encounter and the results of the situation. Use preterit. Fifth – Write the moral. Begin sentence with, “No hay que…”

Spanish: Primero: Pedro, el perro, es un Dalmatian. Pedro es el más grande de la clase. Él es terco, grosero, y es malo en la escuela. Jorge, el gato, es un marrón y blanco. Él es tímido, pequeño, pero es muy simpático. Segundo: Eran las once en la mañana. Porque llovía, Pedro y Jorge jugaban damas en casa de Jorge, antes de almorzar. La madre de Jorge hacía los bocadillos y la sopa mientras los chicos jugaban. Jorge era ganar y Pedro se enojaba. Tercero: Pedro robaba los pedazos de Jorge. Jorge acusaba Pedro de robarlos. Jorge decía una mentira. Pedro era disgustado con Jorge. Cuarto: Jorge dijo a su madre acerca de Pedro. La madre de Jorge preguntó Pedro acerca de los pedazos y él dijo otro mentira. Pedro fue enviado en su casa. Jorge no fue permitido jugar con Pedro otro vez. Quinto: No hay que robar o decir las mentiras.

English: First: Pedro, the dog, is a Dalmatian. Pedro is the biggest in his school. He is mean, rude, and bad in school. Jorge, the cat, is brown and white. He is shy, small, but very nice. Second: It was 11 in the morning. Because it was raining, Pedro and Jorge were playing checkers at Jorge’s house before lunch. Jorge’s mother was making sandwiches and soup while the boys were playing. Jorge was winning and Pedro was getting upset. Third: Pedro stole Jorge’s pieces. Jorge accused Pedro of stealing them. Jorge told a lie. Pedro was upset with Jorge. Fourth: Jorge told his mother about Pedro. His mother asked Pedro about the pieces and he lied again. Pedro was sent home. Jorge was not allowed to play with Pedro again. Fifth: No one should steal or tell lies.

Answer 1

Primero: Pedro, el perro, es un dálmata. Pedro es el más grande de la clase. Es terco, grosero, y es malo en la escuela. Jorge, el gato, es -- marrón y blanco. Es tímido, pequeño, y muy simpático.

Segundo: Eran las once en la mañana. Porque llovía, Pedro y Jorge jugaban damas en casa de Jorge, antes de almorzar. La madre de Jorge hacía los bocadillos y la sopa mientras los chicos jugaban. Jorge ganaba y Pedro se enojaba.

Tercero: Pedro robó los pedazos de Jorge. Jorge acusó a Pedro de robarlos. Jorge dijo una mentira. Pedro estaba disgustado con Jorge.

Cuarto: Jorge le contó a su madre acerca de Pedro. La madre de Jorge preguntó a Pedro acerca de los pedazos y él dijo otra mentira. Pedro fue enviado a su casa. A Jorge no fue permitido jugar con Pedro otra vez.

Quinto: No hay que robar o decir las mentiras.

Good job, but as you can see you have a problem with the indirect and direct objects introduced by a in Spanish.

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• Thank you. I appreciate your comments. They were very informative. :) - graciejo Nov 25, 2009

Answer 2

Pedro es al más grande de la clase.

I don't know that you need al. It seems that el would be more correct.

You don't need to say Él in front of every sentence; rather, just say es.

Jorge, el gato, es un marrón y blanco.

Here, I don't know that you need un. It seems just as correct to just say Jorge es marrón y blanco.

Eran las once en la mañana.

Because you know the exact time, it seems like you would use the preterit tense, fueron. It seems like you make this mistake several times.

That's all I have time to look at right now. I'm not entirely sure I'm right, so feel free to correct me.

• Thanks. Yeah, the preterit and imperfect are still pretty confusing to me. :/ My professor hasn't gone over imperfect tense yet but she gave this assignment. I plan on going over the assignment with her after break for help. Thanks again. - graciejo Nov 25, 2009